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For those who really don't know I have been running an rp that was originally called "Greek Mythology RP" and has only recently been renamed just plainly "Mythology".

Well we had a good 500 pages of posts from a bunch of great people and I didn't want all of it to go to waist. So I decided to change ALL (yes I said all) 500 pages into a type of fan-fic. Or is it the rp in book form? Hmmm . . . *shakes head* Either way here it is if you wanna read it ^^

Prologue-Chapter 4 (Teaser of Ch. 5) (Click to View)
If you feel like commenting on it then feel free ^^
I can't wait for you to get to the later part. And dude, just include me in the parts I wern't in.
Well its going to take awhile so I will try my best
I'm gonna like it. I just know it.
well enjoy
not bad
yeah. unfortunately it exactly isn't in book format
Looks good, I never was in the RP, so I thought this might make me know what happened before yours.
Ever heard of "show, don't tell?"

It doesn't seem to have sunken in here enough. Try to use more descriptive pieces, and scatter them throughout your writing. For example, instead of saying what a character looks like all at once, try interspersing little details of them as part of their reactions to certain events. Here, I'll show you:

I Wrote:It was him, probably the last person the girl wanted to see reflected in her brown eyes.
(This is an excerpt from the chapter of my story I'm working on.)

If you had read the rest of the section in which the girl was introduced, you'd realize that I don't say anything about her eyes until this part, only saying so when necessary. Get it?
Nice Jake cant wait till Jake Dograi Dandeloin and Clarie come in
Chapters are too short ¬_¬
Thank you for the tip Renne. I think I'll have to try that sometime.

DA: I can't help that the chapters are too short. gotto remember this is the rpg in book format. hard to piece together ><
if Jake could have been on line Jake could have already been in the plot
um, you changed Grim. why?
Did i really change Grim? I didn't think I changed him at all . . . I mean, it was in the rpg
he never had a scythe, and his eyes are green unless he is possessed by Necron then they are red.
so when is Jake coming in
whenever he came in on the rpg.
I know its been awhile but here is some more

Chapter 5-Teaser of Chapter 9 (Click to View)
FINALLY! Awesome chapters, can't wait for Chapter 9- Teaser of Chapter 15!
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