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Please Comment and Rate my first fan-fic. Also, I am accepting character submissions.

Bump. Wish somebody would rate.

Cool idea so far. Starting to look a little like GX, but only a little. Then again, so does every fic that has a Duel Academy. Continue writing it, it's really good.

(08-29-2009 01:23 PM)Mystery Guest Wrote: [ -> ]Cool idea so far. Starting to look a little like GX, but only a little. Then again, so does every fic that has a Duel Academy. Continue writing it, it's really good.

Thanks, Next Chapter coming soon.

Chapter 2 - Fairy Breakdown

Seems..interesting
The story moves pretty fast, yet the duel pace seems nice. Wierd.
I might want to submit a charecter, just to see how this goes. Would be a good time too, entrance exams and all...XD

I agree with Mystery Guest, it is a good idea. I like how you put in the location & time before the paragraph. Personally, I wouldn't use the accutal time, just saying it was in the morning, late-afternoon, etc. that way you could put a feel of the area.

For example: "The night was dimly lit by the full moon, as So & So walked to the dorm."

But that's just me. Anyway you just need to put detail in the surroundings, fix some misspells and grammer issues and you'll be on your way. I look forward to new chapters.

"Hmm, let's see you get your way out of this, you little prick." <-EPIC LINE

(08-30-2009 12:22 AM)C-2 Wrote: [ -> ]Seems..interesting
The story moves pretty fast, yet the duel pace seems nice. Wierd.
I might want to submit a charecter, just to see how this goes. Would be a good time too, entrance exams and all...XD

I'd be interested in what sought of Character you can come up with.

Name: Eclipse
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Deck Type: Chimeratech Overdragon OTK
Appearance: Shoulder length jet black hair, dark green eyes, black skinny jeans, tight black t-shirt, and a long black coat.
Bio: A talkative duelist who always wins. He has a ton of friends who admire his dueling skills. He applies at the duel academy to test his skill and to become a greater duelist than Yugi Muto himself.
I hope this is okay...

Hm, I might submit a character also... I just need to see some more story to get a better feel of it.

(08-30-2009 12:24 AM)davidroof1 Wrote: [ -> ]Name: Eclipse
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Deck Type: Chimeratech Overdragon OTK
Appearance: Shoulder length jet black hair, dark green eyes, black skinny jeans, tight black t-shirt, and a long black coat.
Bio: A talkative duelist who always wins. He has a ton of friends who admire his dueling skills. He applies at the duel academy to test his skill and to become a greater duelist than Yugi Muto himself.
I hope this is okay...

Thanks, for the character he sounds cool. I might use him in a few chapters.

Name: Lance Drakous
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Deck Type:
Horus Lockdown

Appearance: Black Hair, A black version of the coat or w/e Zane wore, Dark pants and shirt.
Personality: He is able to formulate stratigies easily, while still showing no expression. He has a very calm dueling style. He does not get excited or angry very often in duels, sort of like Zane. However, he is agressive in duels, much like Chazz, however, he is not blind like Chazz in situations. He is quiet around people he does not know, making it very hard to get to know him. However, if you do get to know him, he can be a great friend. He is especially nice to people he loves.

Bio: His father is a high ranking employee of Kiaba Corp. His mother raised him mostly on her own because of this. Teased by other kids because he was "rich" (Wich he was not), he slowly withdrew himself from the outside world, eventually becoming the quiet, unemotional person he is now. He only shows his emotions to those who he trusts, and loves. He eventually found his way to the game of Yugioh. He excelled, and became a rising star. All throughout his entire Grade School yugioh schooling, he has always been at the top of the class.

I'd like to think you can use him well, and easily with this information Wink

(08-30-2009 03:43 AM)C-2 Wrote: [ -> ]Name: Lance Drakous
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Deck Type:
Horus Lockdown

Appearance: Black Hair, A black version of the coat or w/e Zane wore, Dark pants and shirt.
Personality: He is able to formulate stratigies easily, while still showing no expression. He has a very calm dueling style. He does not get excited or angry very often in duels, sort of like Zane. However, he is agressive in duels, much like Chazz, however, he is not blind like Chazz in situations. He is quiet around people he does not know, making it very hard to get to know him. However, if you do get to know him, he can be a great friend. He is especially nice to people he loves.

Bio: His father is a high ranking employee of Kiaba Corp. His mother raised him mostly on her own because of this. Teased by other kids because he was "rich" (Wich he was not), he slowly withdrew himself from the outside world, eventually becoming the quiet, unemotional person he is now. He only shows his emotions to those who he trusts, and loves. He eventually found his way to the game of Yugioh. He excelled, and became a rising star. All throughout his entire Grade School yugioh schooling, he has always been at the top of the class.

I'd like to think you can use him well, and easily with this information

Accepted, He sounds cool.

Glad you like him ^_^
I just hope you know what Horus Lockdown is. Also, don't use the Wikia version, thats sort of weak XD

Well...it starts like GX, just like Mysty said...
Anyways, your writing errors are fairly small, like 'get's' instead of 'gets'. I assume your a non-English speaker?
Since it's not too bad, you can use all the characters from my fic that only appear in 1 character. With other words: the crappy duelists who were only there in order to lose to one of the main characters.

(08-30-2009 02:55 PM)LarryCotter Wrote: [ -> ]Well...it starts like GX, just like Mysty said...
Anyways, your writing errors are fairly small, like 'get's' instead of 'gets'. I assume your a non-English speaker?
Since it's not too bad, you can use all the characters from my fic that only appear in 1 chapter. With other words: the crappy duelists who were only there in order to lose to one of the main characters.

Fix'd.

Since many of the characters in my fan-fics use made-up archetypes, I can't offer the same support. I could suggest some deck types that should be used at some point:
- Mill deck (deck focused on destroying the opponent's deck. It often gets used against the main character. The main character usually goes down to 0 cards in their deck, but still wins)
- A deck based on any of the instant win conditions, the most popular ones being Final Countdown and Exodia.
- A burn deck
- A lockdown deck
- A deck whose entire strategy is based on just one card
Those are the ones I could think up on the spot. Those are just some ideas for you.

Is it possible to make more than one charecter? lol
I got some random ideas Razz

There have recently been loads of fun archetypes.
Frogs, Morphtronics, Blackwings,...they work fairly simple, unlike some older Deck strategies.

(08-30-2009 02:35 PM)C-2 Wrote: [ -> ]Glad you like him ^_^
I just hope you know what Horus Lockdown is. Also, don't use the Wikia version, thats sort of weak XD

If you could send me a good Horus Lockdown Deck. Mine ain't that good.

(08-30-2009 02:55 PM)LarryCotter Wrote: [ -> ]Well...it starts like GX, just like Mysty said...
Anyways, your writing errors are fairly small, like 'get's' instead of 'gets'. I assume your a non-English speaker?
Since it's not too bad, you can use all the characters from my fic that only appear in 1 character. With other words: the crappy duelists who were only there in order to lose to one of the main characters.

Thanks!

(08-30-2009 04:19 PM)Mystery Guest Wrote: [ -> ]Since many of the characters in my fan-fics use made-up archetypes, I can't offer the same support. I could suggest some deck types that should be used at some point:
- Mill deck (deck focused on destroying the opponent's deck. It often gets used against the main character. The main character usually goes down to 0 cards in their deck, but still wins) [I like this type of Deck, It may come in handy.]
- A deck based on any of the instant win conditions, the most popular ones being Final Countdown and Exodia. [I always have thios sought of Deck in here somewhere.]
- A burn deck [Possibly]
- A lockdown deck [Already Have.]
- A deck whose entire strategy is based on just one card [Dark Magician/Red Eyes]
Those are the ones I could think up on the spot. Those are just some ideas for you.

Thanks for the Ideas.

(08-30-2009 04:31 PM)C-2 Wrote: [ -> ]Is it possible to make more than one charecter? lol
I got some random ideas

Yes, you may.

(08-30-2009 06:17 PM)LarryCotter Wrote: [ -> ]There have recently been loads of fun archetypes.
Frogs, Morphtronics, Blackwings,...they work fairly simple, unlike some older Deck strategies.

I don't like Frogs, but Morphatrnics and Blackwings are cool.

How'd you make those little avatar people? They're cool.

(08-30-2009 08:23 PM)davidroof1 Wrote: [ -> ]How'd you make those little avatar people? They're cool.

Type, Tek Tek in Google.

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