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The Regulants (Click to View)
Union of Justice - Book 1; The Rise Of Daemonus (Click to View)
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Prologue - The Regulants (Click to View)
Chapter 1 - Can I Order A Romantic Day With A Panini, Plz? (Click to View)
Chapter 2 - The Baron of Storms; Whirl, Giralda (Click to View)
Chapter 3 - The Regulants, Part 2 - Illumination (Click to View)
Chapter 4 – Judgement of The Death Gods (Click to View)
Chapter 5 – The Union Shrinks (Click to View)
Chapter 6 - Espada Encounter (Click to View)
Chapter 7 - The Regulants, Part 3 - Deceit & Hatred (Click to View)
damn, I had hoped for the sequel to take place JUST as book 1 ended
Seems really well written. Nexev was never recognized by Fredrik and he seemed also to take orders from Broken. Strange thing is that Broken's bio indicates that the Regulator's were Nexev's idea. Since the bio's and the prologue don't seem to perfectly match up you might wantto make a bit of edits her and there.

I am deeply impressed though the personalities of each character are portrayed rather well (with the exception of Broken appearing to be like Satan).

The minion's aren't very creative or diverse (you just got a large amount of Arrancar from what I can tell) since this is just the beginning however this makes sense. It would however make even more sense if Nexev commented on this (since this is the stuff I usually criticize).

All in all this is very good.

Rag: The epilouge of book one was after a 6 year time skip. Technically this is still just after book 1.
I'm happy it's started and i agree with the things Nexev has pointed out but it's the beginning, things will change as the story goes along.
Wow, I never knew that I was pure evil until I read this chapter, go figure. I know I can be an evil-hearted SOB, but DAMN Kuja, that was almost too painful to read. Oh yeah, I like my theme...I think.

Also, I wrote my bio before I saw yours, so we can edit to make it fit
(10-07-2009 02:51 PM)Nexev Wrote: [ -> ]Seems really well written. Nexev was never recognized by Fredrik and he seemed also to take orders from Broken. Strange thing is that Broken's bio indicates that the Regulator's were Nexev's idea. Since the bio's and the prologue don't seem to perfectly match up you might wantto make a bit of edits her and there.

I am deeply impressed though the personalities of each character are portrayed rather well (with the exception of Broken appearing to be like Satan).

The minion's aren't very creative or diverse (you just got a large amount of Arrancar from what I can tell) since this is just the beginning however this makes sense. It would however make even more sense if Nexev commented on this (since this is the stuff I usually criticize).

All in all this is very good.

Rag: The epilouge of book one was after a 6 year time skip. Technically this is still just after book 1.

I know that, what I meant was I had hoped for the sequel to start the second book 1 ended, as in less than an hour passed between book 1 and 2
@ Nexev: Yeah, I know some of the things are incorrect, and that the minions aren't that creative, sorreh. D: But I'll promise to try and make a few improvements on it the next time. As for Nexev acting like he serves Broken's char, well I never actually cared when I wrote that, since I kinda hasted on the Prologue. D:

@ Broken: Yeowch! Sorreh I made you look like pure evil, BH, it just seemed to fit for a person that wants to shatter the fighters of good to distrust and possibly fight each other, then convert the world into an everlasting darkness.
I guess so, but both BH and Nexev are working together right? But I do like spreading discord
Yes, they are working together. That is a fact, of course.

BTW, I really worked hard to find Themes that actually FIT the characters, so I wanna hear your opinions.
I have a question.

Since Fredrik is you, will he eventually recognize the fact that he is in his union of justice fic?

And the thing wasn't how uncreative the villians were, you will probably add more as you go along. However wouldn't that be just the thing for Nexev to criticize on (he is hyper critical).

I mean look at me, I'm criticizing you about me not criticizing you. How critical can you get?
That is REALLY critical indeed ^^

And I kinda had a plan to make Fredrik realise he is in his own Fic, yes. But that is still an idea that I think about.
well if you're going to make him realize it, when will he appear?
Sooner than you think...

Chapter 1 up
*shakes head* you know these days less and less people slip on banana peels anymore.......
So, what happened to that ol' joke? I am disappointed that it isn't so much common as it was, to be honest...

I am a classic dude. Classic is my stuff when it comes to jokes, the view of bad guys and good guys, and so on.
You also edited the prolouge, I like the improvements on that.

If you don't mind can you send me a copy of everyone's sheet (the one we had to fill out).

Also it may not be much but I found some songs that my go with the other characters as themes.

Fenrir:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YtYzsRMaQ...re=related

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4XIa427Qg...xt_from=PL

Broken
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UFq7d5Fa0...re=related

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s7fgttCG_...re=related

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TXBPOxtPe...re=related (the man up stair's being life itself or the union)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l_1hEWark...annel_page

Nexev
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LDiDK_yBCw0

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2_ryNJVre...re=related

Fredrik
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cJQegmhEShk (He is in his own fic, this is like what his life must feel like)
(10-08-2009 05:04 PM).:Abarai Renji:. Wrote: [ -> ]So, what happened to that ol' joke? I am disappointed that it isn't so much common as it was, to be honest...

I am a classic dude. Classic is my stuff when it comes to jokes, the view of bad guys and good guys, and so on.

There have been times where I miss the classic moments........
Yeah, that is sorta depressing, eh?

Anyway, I will use this moment to make clear that I am being on Youth Weekend this weekend, so no writing will be done this weekend, but my brain will keep on planning, hopefully!
The banana peel was kinda sad Kuja. Kind of a desperate attempt at humour
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