08-14-2008, 09:02 PM
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08-14-2008, 10:43 PM
Chapter 1 Day 1
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Chap1. Day 1
Jamie and Aaron were almost done with a battle, and Jamie happened to be winning. It was about 8:45
Jamie: My Adhesion Trap Hole cuts your Mammoth Graveyard's attack in half!
Aaron: Uh-oh
Jamie's Exiled Force destroyed Aaron's Mammoth Graveyard
Jamie: 1100 Aaron: 0
Aaron: Good job! You're getting better by the day!
Jamie: Thanks, but I wouldn't be able to do it without you giving me your old cards.
Aaron: Maybe someday you can beat my advanced deck! Maybe..
Jamie: Your what? You've been holding back this whole time! I want a rematch!
Aaron: I don't think so shorty! You're definitly not ready. You're highest attack of all your cards is 1500.
Jamie: You just don't want to lose any more of your cards! You're afraid!
Aaron: Whatever....
Jamie walked out of his bedroom with a smile on his face.
Aaron followed after him.
Aaron: You... forgot your prize.
Aaron handed Jamie his "witch of the black forest", wich is what he bet on that he would win.
Jamie: I'll be in my room, reorginizing my deck. Maybe I can find someone else who still plays Yugioh.
Aaron: Good luck! The only one who still plays Yugioh is Allie, and she's way too easy.
Allie was Aaron's 8 year old sister, with not a single card with an attack over 1000.
Aaron walked back into his room.
Jamie: Well, see ya.
Jamie left Aaron's house and walked down the street past the deli, around the corner where the barber shop was being rebuilt after a fire. He was almost there. He could see it a few buildings down. He walked up to the building, and looked into the window.
Jamie: Wow! Just look at all those cards!
Yes, Jamie was staring through the window of "Rj's Yugioh Card Shop". The owner, Rj, was going out of business. Yugioh was becoming less and less popular. He had already made arrangement's for it to be rebuilt into a convienent store. Noone else bought cards there except Jamie and Allie, who only did when she had saved up enough money from searching in the couch cushions.
Rj: Oh, hello there Jamie, looking to buy some cards before the store is gone?
Jamie: Yes, sir. I'd like....... that one.
Rj: I see you have your I on my new Attack+ package.
Rj handed Jamie the cards and got $6 in return.
Jamie: cool, another Rienforcements!
Jamie looked through the cards and found something new.
He read the card aloud.
Jamie: Pyramid Energy... It has two different abilities...
Rj: It's a helpful card! Enjoy it.
Jamie: Ok! Thanks, Rj!
Jamie walked out of the little shop and continued down the street for a few minutes then walked up his driveway.
He entered his house and plopped down on the sofa.
He flipped through the channels until he slowly fell asleep.
Jamie and Aaron were almost done with a battle, and Jamie happened to be winning. It was about 8:45
Jamie: My Adhesion Trap Hole cuts your Mammoth Graveyard's attack in half!
Aaron: Uh-oh
Jamie's Exiled Force destroyed Aaron's Mammoth Graveyard
Jamie: 1100 Aaron: 0
Aaron: Good job! You're getting better by the day!
Jamie: Thanks, but I wouldn't be able to do it without you giving me your old cards.
Aaron: Maybe someday you can beat my advanced deck! Maybe..
Jamie: Your what? You've been holding back this whole time! I want a rematch!
Aaron: I don't think so shorty! You're definitly not ready. You're highest attack of all your cards is 1500.
Jamie: You just don't want to lose any more of your cards! You're afraid!
Aaron: Whatever....
Jamie walked out of his bedroom with a smile on his face.
Aaron followed after him.
Aaron: You... forgot your prize.
Aaron handed Jamie his "witch of the black forest", wich is what he bet on that he would win.
Jamie: I'll be in my room, reorginizing my deck. Maybe I can find someone else who still plays Yugioh.
Aaron: Good luck! The only one who still plays Yugioh is Allie, and she's way too easy.
Allie was Aaron's 8 year old sister, with not a single card with an attack over 1000.
Aaron walked back into his room.
Jamie: Well, see ya.
Jamie left Aaron's house and walked down the street past the deli, around the corner where the barber shop was being rebuilt after a fire. He was almost there. He could see it a few buildings down. He walked up to the building, and looked into the window.
Jamie: Wow! Just look at all those cards!
Yes, Jamie was staring through the window of "Rj's Yugioh Card Shop". The owner, Rj, was going out of business. Yugioh was becoming less and less popular. He had already made arrangement's for it to be rebuilt into a convienent store. Noone else bought cards there except Jamie and Allie, who only did when she had saved up enough money from searching in the couch cushions.
Rj: Oh, hello there Jamie, looking to buy some cards before the store is gone?
Jamie: Yes, sir. I'd like....... that one.
Rj: I see you have your I on my new Attack+ package.
Rj handed Jamie the cards and got $6 in return.
Jamie: cool, another Rienforcements!
Jamie looked through the cards and found something new.
He read the card aloud.
Jamie: Pyramid Energy... It has two different abilities...
Rj: It's a helpful card! Enjoy it.
Jamie: Ok! Thanks, Rj!
Jamie walked out of the little shop and continued down the street for a few minutes then walked up his driveway.
He entered his house and plopped down on the sofa.
He flipped through the channels until he slowly fell asleep.
11-09-2008, 07:35 PM
a reply would be nice. =/ chap. 2 coming soon...
11-09-2008, 09:50 PM
Chapter 1/ Part 2
I'm gonna go ahead and post the chap. 1 characters and bios and such.
After every chapter, I'll post bios for any important characters introduced in that chapter.
Enjoy!
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Chap1. Day 2 Part 2
Jamie rubbed his eyes as he lifted off the couch. He staggered to his father, who was flipping some pancakes in the kitchen.
Jamie's Dad: Morning, kiddo!
Jamie: Hi, dad. What time is it?
The sun glistened brightly outside, telling jamie he had slept in.
Jamie's Dad: 'Bout One Thirty. Why?
Jamie: Just curious.
Jamie sat down infront of a small stack of pancakes and picked up a fork.
His dad laughed slightly.
Jamie's Dad: Those aren't for you, silly. Seth's here!
Seth is Jamie's 12 year-old cousin, who also plays Yugioh. He's very cocky, and doesn't get along well with Jamie.
Seth: Hey twerp?
The words ran up Jamie's spine. He grinned slightly, realizing what Seth would ask him. He sighed.
Jamie: What Seth?
Seth: I challenge you to a Yugioh battle!
Jamie practically said the words himself.
Jamie rubbed his eyes as he lifted off the couch. He staggered to his father, who was flipping some pancakes in the kitchen.
Jamie's Dad: Morning, kiddo!
Jamie: Hi, dad. What time is it?
The sun glistened brightly outside, telling jamie he had slept in.
Jamie's Dad: 'Bout One Thirty. Why?
Jamie: Just curious.
Jamie sat down infront of a small stack of pancakes and picked up a fork.
His dad laughed slightly.
Jamie's Dad: Those aren't for you, silly. Seth's here!
Seth is Jamie's 12 year-old cousin, who also plays Yugioh. He's very cocky, and doesn't get along well with Jamie.
Seth: Hey twerp?
The words ran up Jamie's spine. He grinned slightly, realizing what Seth would ask him. He sighed.
Jamie: What Seth?
Seth: I challenge you to a Yugioh battle!
Jamie practically said the words himself.
I'm gonna go ahead and post the chap. 1 characters and bios and such.
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Jamie Voss
Age: 13
Hair: black
Eyes: green
Current Deck Type: Mixed
Aaron Smith
Age: 14
Hair: Brunette
Eyes: Blue
Current Deck Type: Warrior-type
Allie Smith
Age: 8
Hair: Dirty Blonde
Eyes: Blue
Current Deck Type: Fairy-type
Steven Voss(Jamie's Dad)
Age: 35
Hair: Black
Eyes: Brown
Ray Jackson (Rj)
Age: 49
Hair: Gray
Eyes: Green
Current Deck Type: Zombie-Type
Age: 13
Hair: black
Eyes: green
Current Deck Type: Mixed
Aaron Smith
Age: 14
Hair: Brunette
Eyes: Blue
Current Deck Type: Warrior-type
Allie Smith
Age: 8
Hair: Dirty Blonde
Eyes: Blue
Current Deck Type: Fairy-type
Steven Voss(Jamie's Dad)
Age: 35
Hair: Black
Eyes: Brown
Ray Jackson (Rj)
Age: 49
Hair: Gray
Eyes: Green
Current Deck Type: Zombie-Type
Enjoy!
11-10-2008, 12:17 AM
Chap. 2 Part 1
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Chap2. Day 2
(Jamie: 2000)
(Seth: 2000)
Jamie: I summon Masaki the Legendary Swordsman in attack mode!
(ATK:1100 DEF:1100)
Seth: I summon Armored Lizard in defense mode!
(ATK:1500 DEF:1200)
'But why?' Jamie thought. 'Why not attack?'
Jamie pulled a card off the top of his deck, while maintaining a pokerface.
Jamie: I equip Malevolent Nuzzler to Masaki!
(Masaki's attack is now 1800)
Masaki, attack Armored Lizard!
(Armored Lizard was destroyed)
Seth: I summon Ancient Elf in attack position, and then equip Rienforcements to it!
(ATK:1950 DEF:1200)
Seth: Ancient Elf, attack Masaki the Legendary Swordsman!
(Masaki was destroyed, so Jamie's health was lowered to 1850)
Jamie: Now I use Snatch Steal! It lets me control your monster, and earn 1000 lifepints each of your turns!
(Jamie took control of Ancient Elf)
Jamie: Attack Seth directly!
(Ancient Elf attacked, bringing Seth's health to 550)
Seth: I summon Crystal Beast Emerald Tortoise in Defense Position!
(ATK:600 DEF:2000
Jamie: I summon Exiled Force! Then I use Raigeki to get rid of your monster! Exiled Force, attack!
(Exiled Force attacked Seth directly, finishing the battle)
Seth growled in defeat, unsatisfied by his loss. Jamie grinned slightly.
Steven: Uh, are you guys gonna eat?
The two boys smirked and sat down for a meal. Seth quickly got over the fight.
That's when Eva arrived.
(Jamie: 2000)
(Seth: 2000)
Jamie: I summon Masaki the Legendary Swordsman in attack mode!
(ATK:1100 DEF:1100)
Seth: I summon Armored Lizard in defense mode!
(ATK:1500 DEF:1200)
'But why?' Jamie thought. 'Why not attack?'
Jamie pulled a card off the top of his deck, while maintaining a pokerface.
Jamie: I equip Malevolent Nuzzler to Masaki!
(Masaki's attack is now 1800)
Masaki, attack Armored Lizard!
(Armored Lizard was destroyed)
Seth: I summon Ancient Elf in attack position, and then equip Rienforcements to it!
(ATK:1950 DEF:1200)
Seth: Ancient Elf, attack Masaki the Legendary Swordsman!
(Masaki was destroyed, so Jamie's health was lowered to 1850)
Jamie: Now I use Snatch Steal! It lets me control your monster, and earn 1000 lifepints each of your turns!
(Jamie took control of Ancient Elf)
Jamie: Attack Seth directly!
(Ancient Elf attacked, bringing Seth's health to 550)
Seth: I summon Crystal Beast Emerald Tortoise in Defense Position!
(ATK:600 DEF:2000
Jamie: I summon Exiled Force! Then I use Raigeki to get rid of your monster! Exiled Force, attack!
(Exiled Force attacked Seth directly, finishing the battle)
Seth growled in defeat, unsatisfied by his loss. Jamie grinned slightly.
Steven: Uh, are you guys gonna eat?
The two boys smirked and sat down for a meal. Seth quickly got over the fight.
That's when Eva arrived.
11-10-2008, 05:46 PM
Chapter 2 Part 2
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Chap2. Day 2 Part 2
Eva is a student in Jamie's class. No, that sentence was an insult. Eva is the most beautiful student in Jamie's school... at least, in his eyes she was.
Eva: Hi, guys.
Steven: Oh, hi Eva! You hungry too?
Eva: Depends. You making your famous strawberry pancakes?
Steven: Yepper! Here, enjoy a plate!
Eva: Thanks!
She sat down and cut up the first pancake, chewing as Jamie started some small conversation.
Jamie: S-so, why'd you come here?
Seth: Shutup! Thats no way to talk to .... a lady.
Eva made a face at Seth's immature attempt to get her to like him. She rolled her eyes.
Eva: Aww, your so sweet! Come here and give me a kiss!
Seth leaned in, and Eva slapped him, leaving a slight red mark on his cheek.
Seth: Ow! I guess I had that coming...
Jamie: As I was saying, why are you here?
Eva: There's a bulldozer at Jr's shop!
Jamie's jaw dropped at the words.
Eva is a student in Jamie's class. No, that sentence was an insult. Eva is the most beautiful student in Jamie's school... at least, in his eyes she was.
Eva: Hi, guys.
Steven: Oh, hi Eva! You hungry too?
Eva: Depends. You making your famous strawberry pancakes?
Steven: Yepper! Here, enjoy a plate!
Eva: Thanks!
She sat down and cut up the first pancake, chewing as Jamie started some small conversation.
Jamie: S-so, why'd you come here?
Seth: Shutup! Thats no way to talk to .... a lady.
Eva made a face at Seth's immature attempt to get her to like him. She rolled her eyes.
Eva: Aww, your so sweet! Come here and give me a kiss!
Seth leaned in, and Eva slapped him, leaving a slight red mark on his cheek.
Seth: Ow! I guess I had that coming...
Jamie: As I was saying, why are you here?
Eva: There's a bulldozer at Jr's shop!
Jamie's jaw dropped at the words.
11-10-2008, 10:15 PM
Chapter 2 Part 3Chapter 2 Bios
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Chap2. Day 2 Part 3
Jamie, Seth, and Eva peddled down Main Street, toward Rj's store. As they turned on a corner, Jamie crashed into a carpenter at the half-built barber shop. He acted like the thick man was nothing, and immediately got going. Once they reached the humble shop, they screeched to a stop and gazed at the half-wrecked rummage of what once was "Rj's Yugioh Card Shop".
Jamie, Seth, and Eva: NO!!
Rj sat on a bench nearby, face in his palms. Jamie and Eva were walking to him, while Seth tried to talk to the man controlling the bulldozer.
Rj: Don't bother, kids. It's too late...
Jamie: It's not too late! This can't be happening!!
Eva patted Jamie's back, though she knew it wouldn't make a difference. Seth stepped over to the group.
Seth: The guy won't stop, not that half a shop will do any good...
Eva: I'm sorry Rj, if there's anything I ca-
Rj: It's okay, I'm gonna get better business with a convenience store anyway...
There was a disturbing silence from the four that upset Jamie even worse.
Rj: Why don't you kids run home, now.
The childeren were already on the bikes, heading around the corner and back down Main Street, to break the news to Aaron
Jamie, Seth, and Eva peddled down Main Street, toward Rj's store. As they turned on a corner, Jamie crashed into a carpenter at the half-built barber shop. He acted like the thick man was nothing, and immediately got going. Once they reached the humble shop, they screeched to a stop and gazed at the half-wrecked rummage of what once was "Rj's Yugioh Card Shop".
Jamie, Seth, and Eva: NO!!
Rj sat on a bench nearby, face in his palms. Jamie and Eva were walking to him, while Seth tried to talk to the man controlling the bulldozer.
Rj: Don't bother, kids. It's too late...
Jamie: It's not too late! This can't be happening!!
Eva patted Jamie's back, though she knew it wouldn't make a difference. Seth stepped over to the group.
Seth: The guy won't stop, not that half a shop will do any good...
Eva: I'm sorry Rj, if there's anything I ca-
Rj: It's okay, I'm gonna get better business with a convenience store anyway...
There was a disturbing silence from the four that upset Jamie even worse.
Rj: Why don't you kids run home, now.
The childeren were already on the bikes, heading around the corner and back down Main Street, to break the news to Aaron
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Eva Howard
Age: 13
Hair: Blonde
Eyes: Blue
Seth Voss
Age: 12
Hair: Brunette
Eyes: Brown
Deck Type: Mixed
Age: 13
Hair: Blonde
Eyes: Blue
Seth Voss
Age: 12
Hair: Brunette
Eyes: Brown
Deck Type: Mixed
11-10-2008, 10:52 PM
Short chapters you should make them longer
11-10-2008, 11:25 PM
Thanks for the advice! But, shorter chapters make you feel smarter! XD
Chapter 3 Part1
Chapter 3 Part1
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Chap3. Day 2 Part 1
Aaron spat his soda straight across the patio.
Aaron: WHAT?!
Eva, Jamie, Seth, and Aaron sat on Aaron's patio, around a bonfire. Seth nodded sadly, as did Jamie and Eva.
Eva: I know it's hard to believe but-
Aaron: Hard to believe?! Yugioh is my life!
Jamie: I know.....
Seth: Big deal! We can still play with the cards we have.
Eva: But thats no fun! Playing with the same cards, every single time? No way!
Jamie: I agree!
The sun was out of view and the moon rised gradually. The childeren took turns phoning thier parents, asking to sleep at Aaron's house. Everyone could stay, except Seth, who had to go back to his parents. The three teens slept outside in sleeping bags, roasting hotdogs and marshmellows. They soon fell asleep from exhaustion.
Aaron spat his soda straight across the patio.
Aaron: WHAT?!
Eva, Jamie, Seth, and Aaron sat on Aaron's patio, around a bonfire. Seth nodded sadly, as did Jamie and Eva.
Eva: I know it's hard to believe but-
Aaron: Hard to believe?! Yugioh is my life!
Jamie: I know.....
Seth: Big deal! We can still play with the cards we have.
Eva: But thats no fun! Playing with the same cards, every single time? No way!
Jamie: I agree!
The sun was out of view and the moon rised gradually. The childeren took turns phoning thier parents, asking to sleep at Aaron's house. Everyone could stay, except Seth, who had to go back to his parents. The three teens slept outside in sleeping bags, roasting hotdogs and marshmellows. They soon fell asleep from exhaustion.
11-11-2008, 01:09 AM
Chapter 3/ Part 2
Chapter 3 Part 3
Chapter 3/ Part 4
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Chap3. Day 3 Part 2
Jamie awoke. He looked around to see if the others were awake, but they weren't. They weren't even there! He stepped off his bed and - Flash! - Everything was black.
He appeared in a musty wood, confused.
Jamie: Where am I?
He saw a Petit Angel in the distance. Wait a second....
Jamie: WHO ARE YOU?!
Petit angel: I'm a yugioh monster, silly.
Jamie: What? Where am I?
Petit Angel: You're in the Shadow Realm. Yami Yugi came and saved us all from the darkness!
Jamie: What's happening? How do you exist? How do I get home?
Petit Angel: Just wake up, duh!
Jamie: I'm asleep?!
Petit Angel: Not for long!
Before he knew it, Jamie was thumped on the head by the monster.
Jamie: Woahhhh....
A light flashed brightly, and suddenly, Jamie was awake. For real.
Jamie: Wow.
Eva: What?
Jamie: Nevermind.....
Jamie awoke. He looked around to see if the others were awake, but they weren't. They weren't even there! He stepped off his bed and - Flash! - Everything was black.
He appeared in a musty wood, confused.
Jamie: Where am I?
He saw a Petit Angel in the distance. Wait a second....
Jamie: WHO ARE YOU?!
Petit angel: I'm a yugioh monster, silly.
Jamie: What? Where am I?
Petit Angel: You're in the Shadow Realm. Yami Yugi came and saved us all from the darkness!
Jamie: What's happening? How do you exist? How do I get home?
Petit Angel: Just wake up, duh!
Jamie: I'm asleep?!
Petit Angel: Not for long!
Before he knew it, Jamie was thumped on the head by the monster.
Jamie: Woahhhh....
A light flashed brightly, and suddenly, Jamie was awake. For real.
Jamie: Wow.
Eva: What?
Jamie: Nevermind.....
Chapter 3 Part 3
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Chap3. Day 3 Part 3
Eva: Wanna go to the movies tonight, guys?
Jamie and Aaron: Sure!
Eva: Cool! So, what do you guys wanna do until then?
Aaron: How about a Yugioh battle?
Eva: I guess, but.... I'm not very good....
Aaron: That's okay! Lets go!
Aaron and eva both got their decks and disks, and started.
(Aaron: 2000 Eva: 2000)
Aaron: I'll go first! I summon.... Mammoth Graveyard in attack position!
(ATK:1200 DEF:800)
Eva: I'll start with... Jerry Beans Man!
(ATK:1750 DEF:0)
Eva: Destroy Mammoth Graveyard!
(Beans Man Destroyed Mammoth Graveyard, dropping Aaron's HP to 1450)
Aaron: Go, Sonic Duck! And I'll equip Reinforcements to it!
(ATK:2300 DEF:700)
Aaron: Wipe out her monster!
(Beans Man was destroyed by Sonic Duck, making Eva's health 1450)
Eva: I Use Giant Soldier of Stone in Defense mode!
(ATK:1300 DEF:2000)
Aaron: Grr.. I use Brain control!
(Aaron controls Sonic Duck)
Aaron: Now, Sonic Duck! Defeat her!
(Sonic Duck drops Eva's HP to 0)
(Aaron: 1450 Eva: 0)
Eva: Wow...
Eva: Wanna go to the movies tonight, guys?
Jamie and Aaron: Sure!
Eva: Cool! So, what do you guys wanna do until then?
Aaron: How about a Yugioh battle?
Eva: I guess, but.... I'm not very good....
Aaron: That's okay! Lets go!
Aaron and eva both got their decks and disks, and started.
(Aaron: 2000 Eva: 2000)
Aaron: I'll go first! I summon.... Mammoth Graveyard in attack position!
(ATK:1200 DEF:800)
Eva: I'll start with... Jerry Beans Man!
(ATK:1750 DEF:0)
Eva: Destroy Mammoth Graveyard!
(Beans Man Destroyed Mammoth Graveyard, dropping Aaron's HP to 1450)
Aaron: Go, Sonic Duck! And I'll equip Reinforcements to it!
(ATK:2300 DEF:700)
Aaron: Wipe out her monster!
(Beans Man was destroyed by Sonic Duck, making Eva's health 1450)
Eva: I Use Giant Soldier of Stone in Defense mode!
(ATK:1300 DEF:2000)
Aaron: Grr.. I use Brain control!
(Aaron controls Sonic Duck)
Aaron: Now, Sonic Duck! Defeat her!
(Sonic Duck drops Eva's HP to 0)
(Aaron: 1450 Eva: 0)
Eva: Wow...
Chapter 3/ Part 4
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Chap3. Day 3 Part 4
Jamie: That was quick.
Eva: Wow! You're amazing!
Eva blushed slightly and rested her head on Aaron's chest as he held her. Jamie was green with envy. Eager to change the subject, he reminded the two teens of Rj's convinience store.
Jamie: I wonder how far Rj is getting with his new shop. I hope he's getting better business now.
Eva stepped back from Aaron and straightened up.
Eva: It would be nice to see the new store... Let's go!
The trio hopped on their bicycles and launched down Cherry Street. They turned onto Main St. and curved around the barber shop. They reached "Rj's Stop N' Shop" in no time. Their faces were mournful, and sorry for Rj's loss. Rj was waiting outside with a tray of sodas. He expected the teens' arrival.
Rj: Hello, kids! How's it been?
Aaron: We're doing okay...
Jamie couldn't say the same. His dream -or maybe nightmare is the right term- was haunting him. He could almost here the soft purr of the Petit Angel.
Eva: How are you, Rj?
Rj: I'm makin' it through. Business is booming, I suppose...
Jamie just stared at the clouds, day dreaming.
Rj: Anywho, would you kids like some soda?
Eva and Aaron grabbed a glass, but Jamie just stared in shock.
He swore he could see a Petit Angel, floating in the air, calling his name...
Chap4. Day 3 Part 1
Eva: Jamie? What's wrong?!
Jamie was unable to look away from the Petit Angel. Aaron snapped his fingers.
Aaron: Jamie!!!
Jamie finally turned to Aaron.
Jamie: Do you see that?
He pointed above Rj's head. Everybody turned, confused.
Eva: See what? Did Rj get a haircut?
Jamie: What? You're kidding me, right? You don't see that monster?
Rj: Have you gone insane, Jamie?
Aaron: Yugioh monsters aren't real!
Jamie: But... nevermind. I'm probably just hallucinating....
Eva: Ok then...
Jamie grabbed his soda and slurped it gradually.
Eva and Jamie and Aaron: Thanks, Rj!
Rj: Anytime, kids!
The teenagers then rode to the movie theater, wondering wich movie to watch.
Jamie: That was quick.
Eva: Wow! You're amazing!
Eva blushed slightly and rested her head on Aaron's chest as he held her. Jamie was green with envy. Eager to change the subject, he reminded the two teens of Rj's convinience store.
Jamie: I wonder how far Rj is getting with his new shop. I hope he's getting better business now.
Eva stepped back from Aaron and straightened up.
Eva: It would be nice to see the new store... Let's go!
The trio hopped on their bicycles and launched down Cherry Street. They turned onto Main St. and curved around the barber shop. They reached "Rj's Stop N' Shop" in no time. Their faces were mournful, and sorry for Rj's loss. Rj was waiting outside with a tray of sodas. He expected the teens' arrival.
Rj: Hello, kids! How's it been?
Aaron: We're doing okay...
Jamie couldn't say the same. His dream -or maybe nightmare is the right term- was haunting him. He could almost here the soft purr of the Petit Angel.
Eva: How are you, Rj?
Rj: I'm makin' it through. Business is booming, I suppose...
Jamie just stared at the clouds, day dreaming.
Rj: Anywho, would you kids like some soda?
Eva and Aaron grabbed a glass, but Jamie just stared in shock.
He swore he could see a Petit Angel, floating in the air, calling his name...
Chap4. Day 3 Part 1
Eva: Jamie? What's wrong?!
Jamie was unable to look away from the Petit Angel. Aaron snapped his fingers.
Aaron: Jamie!!!
Jamie finally turned to Aaron.
Jamie: Do you see that?
He pointed above Rj's head. Everybody turned, confused.
Eva: See what? Did Rj get a haircut?
Jamie: What? You're kidding me, right? You don't see that monster?
Rj: Have you gone insane, Jamie?
Aaron: Yugioh monsters aren't real!
Jamie: But... nevermind. I'm probably just hallucinating....
Eva: Ok then...
Jamie grabbed his soda and slurped it gradually.
Eva and Jamie and Aaron: Thanks, Rj!
Rj: Anytime, kids!
The teenagers then rode to the movie theater, wondering wich movie to watch.
11-11-2008, 02:29 AM
Chapter 4 Part 1
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Chap4. Day 4 Part 1
It was the next morning, and Jamie woke up covered in sweat. His dream was just like last time, only he understood things a bit more. Why was he having this dream?!
Jamie rolled out of his bed, and stood up to his mirror. he brushed his hair and changed.
But in the mirror... That reflection!! Petit Angel was whispering!
Petit Angel: Help us... He's gone.... Please...
Jamie's jaw dropped to the floor.
Jamie: Who are you?!
Petit Angel: Do we have to keep having this conversation? I'm a yugioh monster!
Jamie: Not that!!! How are you talking? Why are you here?
Jamie's father opened the door, looking a tad worried.
The "hallucination" disappeared instantly.
Steven: Everything okay, kiddo?
Jamie: Ya, dad... I just stubbed my toe...
Jamie tried to sound honest, but it sounded a little cheesy.
Steven: Okay, just checking... Come on down and have some eggs.
Jamie's dad shut the door behind him, and the monster materialized from the shadows.
Petit Angel: Whew, that was close...
Jamie: Why bother hiding when no one can see you?
Petit Angel: Thats not exactly true. You see, only a very few lucky people can see Duel Spirits.
Jamie: What?!
The angel spoke in a calm, hopeful tone.
Petit Angel: Duel Spirit; a monster spirit that can be seen by gifted humans, that need quidance for variable reasons.
Jamie: I need... guidance? For what?
Petit Angel: Heck if I know... But either way, I'm here!
Jamie: Well, can you leave me alone? I don't need a "duel spirit" and I don't need "guidance"!
Petit Angel: Apparently, you do! I can't leave you until you no longer require guidance!
Jamie: Then you can do find out what I need guidance for. I'm starving!
He rushed down the stairs and into the dining room.
It was the next morning, and Jamie woke up covered in sweat. His dream was just like last time, only he understood things a bit more. Why was he having this dream?!
Jamie rolled out of his bed, and stood up to his mirror. he brushed his hair and changed.
But in the mirror... That reflection!! Petit Angel was whispering!
Petit Angel: Help us... He's gone.... Please...
Jamie's jaw dropped to the floor.
Jamie: Who are you?!
Petit Angel: Do we have to keep having this conversation? I'm a yugioh monster!
Jamie: Not that!!! How are you talking? Why are you here?
Jamie's father opened the door, looking a tad worried.
The "hallucination" disappeared instantly.
Steven: Everything okay, kiddo?
Jamie: Ya, dad... I just stubbed my toe...
Jamie tried to sound honest, but it sounded a little cheesy.
Steven: Okay, just checking... Come on down and have some eggs.
Jamie's dad shut the door behind him, and the monster materialized from the shadows.
Petit Angel: Whew, that was close...
Jamie: Why bother hiding when no one can see you?
Petit Angel: Thats not exactly true. You see, only a very few lucky people can see Duel Spirits.
Jamie: What?!
The angel spoke in a calm, hopeful tone.
Petit Angel: Duel Spirit; a monster spirit that can be seen by gifted humans, that need quidance for variable reasons.
Jamie: I need... guidance? For what?
Petit Angel: Heck if I know... But either way, I'm here!
Jamie: Well, can you leave me alone? I don't need a "duel spirit" and I don't need "guidance"!
Petit Angel: Apparently, you do! I can't leave you until you no longer require guidance!
Jamie: Then you can do find out what I need guidance for. I'm starving!
He rushed down the stairs and into the dining room.
11-11-2008, 01:26 PM
Damage to your life points keep hapenning even when the monsters are in defense mode you should fix that
11-11-2008, 02:23 PM
Omg, I'm sorry. You're right. I haven't played/watched yugioh in a bit... Thanks!
I know I messed up with that somewhere... but I just can't find it. Can you quote the post and bold the part where I messed up? I'm eager to fix my mistake(s)!
I know I messed up with that somewhere... but I just can't find it. Can you quote the post and bold the part where I messed up? I'm eager to fix my mistake(s)!
11-11-2008, 02:35 PM
It was good ..theirs nothing more to say their are a few spelling problems but nothing to bad however. 8/10
11-11-2008, 02:41 PM
(11-11-2008 01:09 AM)shiko11 Wrote: [ -> ]Chap3. Day 3 Part 2
Jamie awoke. He looked around to see if the others were awake, but they weren't. They weren't even there! He stepped off his bed and - Flash! - Everything was black.
He appeared in a musty wood, confused.
Jamie: Where am I?
He saw a Petit Angel in the distance. Wait a second....
Jamie: WHO ARE YOU?!
Petit angel: I'm a yugioh monster, silly.
Jamie: What? Where am I?
Petit Angel: You're in the Shadow Realm. Yami Yugi came and saved us all from the darkness!
Jamie: What's happening? How do you exist? How do I get home?
Petit Angel: Just wake up, duh!
Jamie: I'm asleep?!
Petit Angel: Not for long!
Before he knew it, Jamie was thumped on the head by the monster.
Jamie: Woahhhh....
A light flashed brightly, and suddenly, Jamie was awake. For real.
Jamie: Wow.
Eva: What?
Jamie: Nevermind.....
Chap3. Day 3 Part 3
Eva: Wanna go to the movies tonight, guys?
Jamie and Aaron: Sure!
Eva: Cool! So, what do you guys wanna do until then?
Aaron: How about a Yugioh battle?
Eva: I guess, but.... I'm not very good....
Aaron: That's okay! Lets go!
Aaron and eva both got their decks and disks, and started.
(Aaron: 2000 Eva: 2000)
Aaron: I'll go first! I summon.... Mammoth Graveyard in attack position!
(ATK:1200 DEF:800)
Eva: I'll start with... Jerry Beans Man!
(ATK:1750 DEF:0)
Eva: Destroy Mammoth Graveyard!
(Beans Man Destroyed Mammoth Graveyard, dropping Aaron's HP to 1450)
Aaron: Go, Sonic Duck! And I'll equip Reinforcements to it!
(ATK:2300 DEF:700)
Aaron: Wipe out her monster!
(Beans Man was destroyed by Sonic Duck, making Eva's health 1450)
Eva: I Use Giant Soldier of Stone in Defense mode!
(ATK:1300 DEF:2000)
Aaron: Grr.. I use Brain control!
(Aaron controls Sonic Duck)
Aaron: Now, Sonic Duck! Defeat her!
(Sonic Duck drops Eva's HP to 0)
(Aaron: 1450 Eva: 0)
Eva: Wow...
Chap3. Day 3 Part 4
Jamie: That was quick.
Eva: Wow! You're amazing!
Eva blushed slightly and rested her head on Aaron's chest as he held her. Jamie was green with envy. Eager to change the subject, he reminded the two teens of Rj's convinience store.
Jamie: I wonder how far Rj is getting with his new shop. I hope he's getting better business now.
Eva stepped back from Aaron and straightened up.
Eva: It would be nice to see the new store... Let's go!
The trio hopped on their bicycles and launched down Cherry Street. They turned onto Main St. and curved around the barber shop. They reached "Rj's Stop N' Shop" in no time. Their faces were mournful, and sorry for Rj's loss. Rj was waiting outside with a tray of sodas. He expected the teens' arrival.
Rj: Hello, kids! How's it been?
Aaron: We're doing okay...
Jamie couldn't say the same. His dream -or maybe nightmare is the right term- was haunting him. He could almost here the soft purr of the Petit Angel.
Eva: How are you, Rj?
Rj: I'm makin' it through. Business is booming, I suppose...
Jamie just stared at the clouds, day dreaming.
Rj: Anywho, would you kids like some soda?
Eva and Aaron grabbed a glass, but Jamie just stared in shock.
He swore he could see a Petit Angel, floating in the air, calling his name...
Chap4. Day 3 Part 1
Eva: Jamie? What's wrong?!
Jamie was unable to look away from the Petit Angel. Aaron snapped his fingers.
Aaron: Jamie!!!
Jamie finally turned to Aaron.
Jamie: Do you see that?
He pointed above Rj's head. Everybody turned, confused.
Eva: See what? Did Rj get a haircut?
Jamie: What? You're kidding me, right? You don't see that monster?
Rj: Have you gone insane, Jamie?
Aaron: Yugioh monsters aren't real!
Jamie: But... nevermind. I'm probably just hallucinating....
Eva: Ok then...
Jamie grabbed his soda and slurped it gradually.
Eva and Jamie and Aaron: Thanks, Rj!
Rj: Anytime, kids!
The teenagers then rode to the movie theater, wondering wich movie to watch.
On the second one at the end When Sonic Bird ATKed Giant Soldier of Stone
(11-10-2008 12:17 AM)shiko11 Wrote: [ -> ]Chap2. Day 2
(Jamie: 2000)
(Seth: 2000)
Jamie: I summon Masaki the Legendary Swordsman in attack mode!
(ATK:1100 DEF:1100)
Seth: I summon Armored Lizard in defense mode!
(ATK:1500 DEF:1200)
'But why?' Jamie thought. 'Why not attack?'
Jamie pulled a card off the top of his deck, while maintaining a pokerface.
Jamie: I equip Malevolent Nuzzler to Masaki!
(Masaki's attack is now 1800)
Masaki, attack Armored Lizard!
(Armored Lizard was destroyed, and Seth's health dropped to 1400)
Seth: I summon Ancient Elf in attack position, and then equip Rienforcements to it!
(ATK:1950 DEF:1200)
Seth: Ancient Elf, attack Masaki the Legendary Swordsman!
(Masaki was destroyed, so Jamie's health was lowered to 1850)
Jamie: Now I use Snatch Steal! It lets me control your monster, and earn 1000 lifepints each of your turns!
(Jamie took control of Ancient Elf)
Jamie: Attack Seth directly!
(Ancient Elf attacked, finishing the battle)
(Jamie: 1850)
(Seth: 0000)
Seth growled in defeat, unsatisfied by his loss. Jamie grinned slightly.
Steven: Uh, are you guys gonna eat?
The two boys smirked and sat down for a meal. Seth quickly got over the fight.
That's when SHE arrived. Eva.
Oh sorry didn't realize Brain control but on this one when Masaki atacked Armored lizard it did damage
11-11-2008, 03:09 PM
Chapter 4. Part 2
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Chap4. Day 4 Part 2
Aaron and Eva were alone, sitting at the park.
Eva: So... What do you wanna' do?
Aaron spent no time thinking. He pulled out a racket.
Aaron: You up for some tennis?
That pretty much ruined the moment for Eva. She was the romantic type, and definitely not a sports jock.
Eva: Uh... sure, I guess...
Aaron: You okay?
Eva: Ya, just wondering how Jamie's doing... Do you think he's okay?
Aaron: What do you mean, "okay"? Are you talking about the hallucinations?
Eva: Ya, ya. But, I feel like somehow... nevermind.
Aaron: Okay... so, ready?
Eva: Anytime!
Aaron and Eva walked through the dew of the grass, toward the hard, concrete tennis court.
They chose their sides, grabbed their equipment, and started.
An hour later, they were finished. Aaron won, undoubtedly. Jamie had arrived around that time. And what a bad time to arrive.
What Jamie had seen destroyed his friendship with Aaron completely. Jamie had appeared to the scene of Eva and Aaron kissing on the court. They didn't notice him. He simply walked back home, in tears.
Eva: Did you hear something?
Aaron: Nah. Want me to walk you home?
Eva: Sure. I'm tired.
The two walked down Plum Street and reached Eva's home in no time.
Aaron and Eva were alone, sitting at the park.
Eva: So... What do you wanna' do?
Aaron spent no time thinking. He pulled out a racket.
Aaron: You up for some tennis?
That pretty much ruined the moment for Eva. She was the romantic type, and definitely not a sports jock.
Eva: Uh... sure, I guess...
Aaron: You okay?
Eva: Ya, just wondering how Jamie's doing... Do you think he's okay?
Aaron: What do you mean, "okay"? Are you talking about the hallucinations?
Eva: Ya, ya. But, I feel like somehow... nevermind.
Aaron: Okay... so, ready?
Eva: Anytime!
Aaron and Eva walked through the dew of the grass, toward the hard, concrete tennis court.
They chose their sides, grabbed their equipment, and started.
An hour later, they were finished. Aaron won, undoubtedly. Jamie had arrived around that time. And what a bad time to arrive.
What Jamie had seen destroyed his friendship with Aaron completely. Jamie had appeared to the scene of Eva and Aaron kissing on the court. They didn't notice him. He simply walked back home, in tears.
Eva: Did you hear something?
Aaron: Nah. Want me to walk you home?
Eva: Sure. I'm tired.
The two walked down Plum Street and reached Eva's home in no time.
11-11-2008, 03:16 PM
Armored Lizard was in Defense Mode and Malevolent Nuzzler doesn't allow the effect of dealing Damage when the monster is in Defense Position
11-11-2008, 03:23 PM
Ooh... woops. I'm gonna go ahead and fix that now.
11-11-2008, 03:25 PM
LOL good fanfic though other than that and most duels normally have 4000 life points or 8000 7.6/10
11-11-2008, 03:43 PM
Well your welcome the story is good but now that I think about it most duels do use 4000 life Points but a normal Duel you find others useing 8000. No ones used 2000 life points sense the game first came out.
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