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Episode 1 - Yusei and the Dark Portal Part 1

Goodwin: So Yusei has escaped New Domino City?
Jack: Yes!
Goodwin: First of all Yusei is lucky that he didn't get arrested again--
Jack: And second I need a rematch.
Goodwin: Not really, I have an idea.
Yusei: *Riding his Duel runner* I'm coming to defeat you Goodwin.
Jack: You are going to duel Yusei. I got defeated by him and I bet it is your turn to get defeated.
Goodwin: Wrong! Im going to win since I got my new Fenelsus Deck from Yusei's pipsqueak Tank.
Goodwin: Yusei will lose. Trust me.
Yusei: I'm going to settle this foolishness right now Goodwin. Watch me win and get rid of this tattoo for good.
Goodwin: *Follows behind him* Getting rid of your tattoo huh? Well then how about a Turbo Duel?
*Pushes the button*
Computer: Duel Mode engaged. Auto-Pilot standing by.
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Goodwin: I'll start, and I summon Dark Fenelsus.
ATK: 1700
Computer: When Dark Fenelsus destroys a monster face-down in defense mode, your opponent loses 800 life points of damage.
Yusei: Not bad for a Batman show.
Goodwin: Next I play the Speed Spell - Fenelsus Storm. Watch as Dark Fenelsus takes away 500 of your life points.
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Goodwin: Next I play 2 cards face-down. Your move.
Yusei: Alright then. Let's rev it up with Speed Warrior.
ATK: 900
Computer: When Speed Warrior is Normal Summoned successfully his Attack Points gets doubled.
ATK: 1800
Yusei: Speed Warrior send Dark Fenelsus to the grave.
Goodwin: I activate my trap. Fenelsus Shield.
LP: |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||5300
Yusei: How did I lose 1800 life points??
Goodwin: Fenelsus Shield activates when you attack my Dark Fenelsus. You take damage equal to your monster's ATK points.
Yusei: I end my turn.
Goodwin: Alright behold! I summon Fenelsus Magician.
ATK: 1500
Goodwin: Take down his Speed Warrior.
ATK: 900
LP: |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||4900
Goodwin: Next my Dark Fenelsus attacks you directly.
LP: ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||2500
Yusei: I activate my trap. Graceful Revival. It brings back my Speed Warrior.
ATK: 900
Yusei: Now its my turn and I summon Junk Synchron.
ATK: 1300
Yusei: Next I tune my Junk Synchron with my Speed Warrior to Synchro Summon Junk Warrior.
ATK: 2300
Yusei: Junk Warrior send Fenelsus Magician to the scrap heap.
*Goodwin's Fenelsus Shield shows up*
Yusei: Oh man not another Fenelsus Shield.
LP: ||200
Goodwin: What's the matter Yusei? Can't take the power of my Fenelsus. With 200 life points left you better make this turn count or you will be into the Dark Portal for a Day.
Mwhahahahaha! Mwhahahahahahahahaha! Mwhahahahaha!

To Be Continued..
Theme:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PqLVxbrAuqQ

9.8/10

n00bs.

Seriously, this is so flammable it's not even funny. This is the kind of thing that represents the epitome of bad fanfic. If you're going to make it TCG-centered, at least have Decks that are worth the paper they're printed on. You even spelled Godwin wrong.

F, 1%, 0.1/10, etc for absolute n00bishness.

Episode 2 - Yusei and the Dark Portal Part 2.

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Now let's get up to speed with Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's:
Yusei: *Riding his Duel runner* I'm coming to defeat you Goodwin.
Jack: You are going to duel Yusei!? I got defeated by him and I bet it is your turn to get defeated.
Goodwin: Wrong! Im going to win since I got my new Fenelsus Deck from Yusei's pipsqueak Tank.
Goodwin: Yusei will lose. Trust me.
Goodwin: I'll start, and I summon Dark Fenelsus.
Yusei: Not bad for a Batman show.
Yusei: Let's rev it up with Speed Warrior.
ATK: 900
Goodwin: I activate my trap. Fenelsus Shield.
Goodwin: What's the matter Yusei? Can't take the power of my Fenelsus. With 200 life points left you better make this turn count or you will be into the Dark Portal for a Day.
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LP: ||200
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Yusei: What do you mean I will be into a portal?
Goodwin: You have a lot to learn Yusei. 1000's of years ago in Egypt, A portal comes open and the Pharaoh recognizes it and it was known as the Dark Portal. It is a dangerous place with zombies, monsters, ghosts, and even no houses.
Yusei: It does sound dangerous. Now let's duel and not hear a bedtime story. I believe it's your turn Goodwin.
Goodwin: Alright then. Prepare to lose I summon a Tuner-Monster known as the Fireball from the Distant Planet.
ATK: 1500
next I activate the Speed Spell - Level Up. This Spell levels my monster by 2 levels.
Level: ||||
Next I tune my Fireball with my Fenelsus Magician to Synchro Summon your demise.
*Flames comes all around the stage.*
I SYNCHRO SUMMON LARVAL, THE KING FENELSUS! MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
ATK: 3400
Prepare to lose Yusei. Now Larval, destroy his Junk Warrior and the rest of his life points.
Yusei: I activate, Mirror Force. Your monster is toast.
Goodwin: NOOOOO! Grrr you will pay for that while I activate this trap card. FENELSIS VOLCANO. This trap activates when you destroy my King. This volcano erupts in 3 turns and once it does, your life points is doomed. Your move, satellite sucker!
Yusei: I activate the Speed Spell - Synchro's Revenge. You lose life points equal to Junk Warrior's attack points.
LP: ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||5700
Yusei: Next I summon Junk Warrior - Bravery.
ATK: 2800
if you like that then your going to love his special ability when you just destroyed my Junk Warrior a turn ago you activated Junk Warrior - Bravery's Special Ability It increases the ATK and DEF by 300 for each monster in my graveyard, and I have 6 so he gets 1200 points.
ATK: 4000
Also it gets to be Special Summoned. So Junk Warrior - Bravery attack his life points directly.
LP: ||||||||||||1700
LP: ||200
Thats not all you lose life points equal to my monster's HALF OF ITS ATTACK POINTS.
LP: 0
Goodwin: It can't be! ME LOST TO HIM!? NOOOOOOOOO! I almost had him.
Jack(Thinking): Told you Goodwin.
*Clouds gets gray and thunderstorm appears*
Yusei: What's going on?
*Thunder strikes*
To Be Continued...

(10-30-2008 06:27 PM)pegasus200300400 Wrote: [ -> ]It increases the ATK and DEF by 300 for each monster in my graveyard, and I have 6 so he gets 1200 points.

This, plus "Goodwin", sums up the quality of your atrocious attempt at writing.

Maybe i was wrong about this fic 0.01/10 (second episode was kinda rubbish)

Episode 3 - The Forgiven Card Part 1

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Skipping the previously stuff
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*thunder crashes*

Tank: This can't be good.
Goodwin: Mwhahahahaha This must be the lightning from the Dark Portal. It's returning soon.
Yusei: *Drives away as Hunter(has a new deck and is in the middle of the duel with Jack)
Hunter: |||||||||2100
Jack: |||||||||||||||||||3600
Hunter: Face it Jack ol' buddy my Graveyard Dragon is gonna wipe the rest of your life points and I shall claim champion. My monster has your Red Dragon Archfiend and him and Graveyard Dragon will make sure you will lose.




Graveyard Dragon attack his Mad Archfiend with your Claw of Fate.
Jack: Wrong I activate Creature Swap. I switch my Mad Archfiend.
Hunter: Take my Graveyard Dragon.
Jack: Bad choice Hunter. My Graveyard Dragon finish what you have started. CLAW OF FATE.
you lose life points instead of me.
LP: |||||||1900
Hunter: I end my turn with a couple of face-downs.
Yusei: Whats with the thunderstorms!?
Goodwin: Well I might TAKE YOU TO THERE. *A portal appears*
Yusei: Oh no that must be---
Goodwin: The Dark Portal tallyho Yusei.
Mwhahahahaha.
*Goodwin teleports back to his place*
*Jack catches him*
Yusei: Jack?
Jack: I didn't want you to leave Yusei. So I had to catch you even though I am your rival.
Yusei: *The thunderstorms goes away*
Goodwin: IMPOSSIBLE THOSE THUNDERSTORMS MUST BE A FAKE!
Jack: So Yusei I have seen the whole duel with you and Goodwin.
(Yusei: I summon Junk Warrior - Bravery.)

(Attack his life points directly.)
(LP: 0)
Jack: That was amazing.
How about a rematch with me and you tomorrow night?
Yusei: Why not Jack?
Jack: A rematch but no Turbo Duel.
Yusei(Thinking): At least I got my deck back from the Facility or I would defiantly lose.
???: Yusei?
Yusei: Hey Christy what's up?
Christy: Do you know it's 2:00AM?
*Yusei Gasps*
Yusei: Crap I gotta go to bed.
Christy: Hey can I sleep with you?
Yusei: Sure!
*Christy opens the door and goes to sleep*
Christy: Good Night Yusei.
Yusei: Night.
*Lights gets killed*
(Later at Jack's Place)
Jack(Thinking): *Looks at a Card* Mwhahahahahaha Mwhahahahahahahahahahahahaa

To Be Continued...

If I'm not mistaken, he's called "Goodwin" in the dub.

This is still bad. Also, 2/3's of your chapters have ended with "Mwahahaha". Period.

Episode 4 - The Forgiven Card Part 2

Theme: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PqLVxbrAuqQ

/!\Skipped the previous/!\

*At Yugi's Grandpa's Shop*

Yugi: Hey Joey have you heard of this guy?
Joey: Yusei Fudo? I never heard of him. But I turbo dueled several times.
Yugi: He is the most popular Turbo Duelist. He has defeated Jack Atlas last year.
Joey: LAST YEAR!? That's nuts. I'm going to duel him and nothing more.
Yugi: Joey! Wait!
Yusei: You must be Joey Wheeler! Huh?
(Thinking): is that Yugi Muto?
Joey: You call yourself a duelist?
Yusei: Well let's duel and find out Joey Wheeler.
*Both Duel Disks Gets Started*
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Joey: As you wish "Yusei" I'll get this duel started. I summon Destructotron.




NOTE: Just in case Spoiler dont work here is computer.
Computer: When Destructroton destroys another Psychic-Type Monster on the field. You can pay -1000 life points to destroy 1 face-down Spell or Trap card on the field.

Joey: Then I place 3 cards face-down and end my turn.
Yusei: Alright my move *Draws and Gasps* I never had this card. *Looks at Hunter's Graveyard Dragon* I know!
(Yusei: You lost Hunter!)
(Hunter: Nooooooo! *Graveyard dragon gets under Yusei's deck as he picks it up without even noticing*)
(Yusei: Its like the 10th time you lose a duel Hunter Shouldn't you take a break?)
Yusei: Forget it. I summon Speed Warrior. With his Special Ability he gets doubled for 1 turn.



Yusei: Speed Warrior send his Destructroton to the Scrap Heap.
*A Chain Traps Speed Warrior*
Yusei: WHAT IS THAT!?
Joey: It's my trap. Kunai with Chain, your monster switches to defense mode while Destructroton gets a extra 500 attack points.




Joey: Now my monster attack his Speed Warrior.
Yusei: Grrrrr
LP: |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||8000
Joey: Poor Yusei, or I say prepare to lose.
LP: |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||8000
Goodwin: Almost time for the match sir. But bad news is he is at the Game Shop at Domino City.
Jack: What!?
Joey: My move. I summon Comrade Swordsman of Landstar in attack mode.


Yusei: Thats a tuner monster!
Joey: Precisely now I tune up my Swordsman with my Destructroton to Synchro Summon. Black Rose Dragon!


Computer: Black Rose Dragon, is a Level 7, Fire Attribute, Synchro Monster. It has 2400 ATK points and 1800 DEF points.

Yusei: That thing is huge.
Joey: Go ahead Yusei make your move.
Yusei: I will!
Yusei(Thinking): Oh man, Joey already Synchro Summoned his monster and I didn't. Luckily I have Junk Warrior - Bravery. But I don't have Junk Warrior the field. Wait I have Graceful Revival and Junk Synchron in my hand. PERFECT!
Yusei: I activate my trap. Graceful Revival. It brings back my Speed Warrior.


Yusei: Next I summon Junk Synchron.


Yusei: And noooooow I--
Jack: Yusei!
Joey, Yugi, and Yusei: Jack!?
Jack: Yugi Muto? Joey Wheeler?
Both: In the flesh.
Jack: Yusei remember what I told you last night?

(Jack: How about a rematch with me and you tomorrow night?)
(Yusei: Why not Jack?)
(Jack: A rematch but no Turbo Duel.)
(Yusei: It's a deal.)

Yusei: Uh yea. But I am in a Middle of a Duel with Joey Wheeler.
Jack: Ok. Just make this quick.
Yusei: as I was saying, and noooooow I tune up my Junk Synchron with my Speed Warrior to Synchro Summon. Junk Warrior. LETS REV IT UP!


Yusei(Thinking): This is it will I get to be able to Special Summon *Looks at my hand* my Junk Warrior - Bravery, or this is the end for my duels. Here goes.

Yusei: Alright Joey you Prepare to lose.

To Be Continued...

Boo. Just plain boo.

(11-11-2008 01:39 AM)shiko11 Wrote: [ -> ]Boo. Just plain boo.

Shut up it will come better soon.


Episode 5 - The Forgiven Card Part 3.

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Now Lets Get Up to Speed, with Yu-Gi-Oh! 5D's:
Yusei: You must be Joey Wheeler!
*Both Duel Disks Gets Started*
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Yusei: Speed Warrior send his Destructroton to the Scrap Heap.
*A Chain Traps Speed Warrior*
Yusei: WHAT IS THAT!?
Joey: Kunai with Chain!
Yusei: And noooooow I--
Jack: Yusei remember what I told you last night?
Yusei: Uh yea. But I am in a Middle of a Duel with Joey Wheeler.
Yusei: Alright Joey you Prepare to lose.
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Theme: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PqLVxbrAuqQ

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Yusei(Thinking): Could he have a trap to stop my Warrior. Oh I am Yusei Fudo. I am doing it anyway.
Yusei: ALRIGHT! I offer my Junk Warrior to Special Summon, Junk Warrior - Bravery.

Yusei: Now! I activate his Special Ability since Junk Warrior was in the graveyard he gets a extra 300 points for each monster in my graveyard. I believe I have 4 so 1200 points for Junk Warrior.

Yugi: 4000!? What?
Yusei: Junk Warrior - Bravery send his Black Rose Dragon TO THE SCRAP HEAP!
LP: |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||6400
Jack: *Claps slowly* Well done Yusei. You have destroyed his dragon.
Yusei: Thats not all joey. You lose 2000 life points. Meaning his special ability, when he destroys a monster, you lose half of my monster's attack points out of your life points.
LP: ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||4400
Yusei: I place 2 cards face-down and end my turn.
Joey: Alright I set 2 cards face-down as well, and this. COPYCAT.



Computer: Copycat, is a monster card that can copy any card on your opponent's side of the field or in their graveyard.

Joey: Alright Copycat Copy his Junk Warrior - Bravery, and all his effects.


Joey: Also I activate this trap. Graverobber. Rob his Junk Warrior.
That means my monster gives 300 points for each my monster in my graveyard. I have 4 so he gets 1200 points as well.


Yusei: We are tied
Joey: Alright then I activate my other down card. Axe of Despair.
He gets 5000 attack points.


LP: |||||||||||||||||||2400
Joey: Alright Copycat finish off his Junk Warrior.
Yusei: WRONG! ACTIVATE MAGIC JAMMER! Junk Warrior - Bravery end this.
LP: 0
Joey: This can't be. I lost.
Jack: Alright Yusei. Time to go back to New Domino City.
Joey: New Domino City? Wheres that at?
Yusei: Not far. How about you guys come with us?
Joey: Sure. Why not?
Yusei: Alright but wait. I still need to give this to hunter.
*Shows everyone his Graveyard Dragon*
Jack: His Graveyard Dragon. You must bring it back to him.
Yusei: Let's go.
Jack(Thinking): Also I got the forgiven card. Your Stardust Dragon. Soon you guys will come there for nothing. And no one will forgive me.

To Be Continued...

Listen if anyone be's ignorant about my Fan-Fic, they will be reported.

The number of cliches in this story are astounding.