11-03-2008, 08:44 PM
NOTE:This is my first fan fic so go easy on me.
Ch.1 the beginning....
On the dueling field you could see Alan and Liza begining to have a frendly duel while waiting for Zeke and Max (they are brothers),(they didn't know they and a couple of their friends would be sucked into an alterant demention filled with monsters and villans and stuff) ''DUEL'' they said. alan started he said ''Draw,I summon Yang,Fearless Warrior in attack mode! ATK:1600 DEF:1200 and set 2 cards end turn''. Liza said ''I'll start by summoning Aether DreamLord in defence mode!ATK:1400 DEF:1000 and set a face-down. your move'' ''Draw'' alan said ''Yang,Fearless Warrior atta-''Suddenly, Max starts running towards them,screaming Max said ''Help! Zeke has been kidnapped by some guy named Saten! Help meeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'' suddenly (again) a portal to hell opened up they all said ''That must be where Zeke is kidnapped, let's go'' so they went to hell.......to be continued....
Ch.2 a terrible chapter.....
The kids stepped out of the portal,and stared at hell, Max said ''So this is hell.'' he stared at spirits screaming and monsters scerching in the spirits .Suddenly a monster grabbed liza she kicked and punching at the horrorafing beast but alas, liza was hit upside the head by a club.The other two tried to get away but they were hit upside to head there worlds went black.
Rate fairly!
Ch.1 the beginning....
On the dueling field you could see Alan and Liza begining to have a frendly duel while waiting for Zeke and Max (they are brothers),(they didn't know they and a couple of their friends would be sucked into an alterant demention filled with monsters and villans and stuff) ''DUEL'' they said. alan started he said ''Draw,I summon Yang,Fearless Warrior in attack mode! ATK:1600 DEF:1200 and set 2 cards end turn''. Liza said ''I'll start by summoning Aether DreamLord in defence mode!ATK:1400 DEF:1000 and set a face-down. your move'' ''Draw'' alan said ''Yang,Fearless Warrior atta-''Suddenly, Max starts running towards them,screaming Max said ''Help! Zeke has been kidnapped by some guy named Saten! Help meeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'' suddenly (again) a portal to hell opened up they all said ''That must be where Zeke is kidnapped, let's go'' so they went to hell.......to be continued....
Ch.2 a terrible chapter.....
The kids stepped out of the portal,and stared at hell, Max said ''So this is hell.'' he stared at spirits screaming and monsters scerching in the spirits .Suddenly a monster grabbed liza she kicked and punching at the horrorafing beast but alas, liza was hit upside the head by a club.The other two tried to get away but they were hit upside to head there worlds went black.
Rate fairly!
and yah, you could do better.
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