First FanFic - Please Comment

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I think maybe after reading this, you'll soon realise that im a complete bastard for noticing errors and i'll agree with you on that.....but i did notice some errors in this duel.

I noticed you played Valhalla, Hall of the Fallen as field spel, even though it is actually a continuous spell. However I personally prefer it as a field spell. Makes more sense if you know what i mean, so a good and bad point there.

Second, Junk Warrior (him again haha) KEEPS the attack points he gains from a level 2 or weaker monster. So effectively Junk Warrior beat Guardian Angel Joan (it was wasn't it?) without suiciding.

Bit of terminology (I'm a bit of a stickler when it comes to terminology so bear with me). You said that Alex sets Fairy Guardian? in defence mode. If he set it, it would be face-down, not face-up.

Lastly.......I'm aware you watched the anime (GX, then Yugi and Joey etc) so you know that they play spell cards as quick-plays. I'm not sure if that's the route you're taking, but cool if you are. I picked that out because Monster Reincarnation isn't a quick-play.

Some really critical things there so sorry, but you might need to know for the future chapters . If you want anyone to proof read it before you post, i'll be happy to. go on my page and get my msn address and email it to me. I'll email it back with what you can change.
But overall im cool with all that went on. Like for example playing Monster Reincarnation to dispose of Avian to increase Colossal Fighter. Any way........did you find mine? and what did you think? just so you know there aren't any duels for quite some time :L but it's still pretty good in my opinion