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[legendhiro]

(04-13-2009 03:38 PM)Nitton Wrote:  I have read later chapters of your fanfic which consists almost entirely of dialogue, including the example you posted.

(04-13-2009 03:29 PM)legendhiro Wrote:  there's no more dialog than some of these others.

"Some of these others" aren't accepted, either.

but kuja's was. my story has no more dialog than his. not if you actually read the whole thing.

i'm not trying to be a jerk, i just think i deserve a chance.

[Silent Omega]

@ legendhiro:Why don't you just accept it?

@ Nitton: I might post in my 'Aura Warriors', once I've reached 8 chapters

[legendhiro]

i do accept it, and i plan to reapply. i just want to make sure i had a fair shot.

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

Take further arguments to PM.

Kuja's story contained a higher amount of descriptions, whereas yours was pretty much just dialogue.

[LarryCotter]

@legendhiro: "Read the whole thing"? Are you f***ing serious? It took me two weeks to finish the first 3 books!

[LarryCotter]

I guess mine isn't in it...? Of course it isn't. The Duels in the first 24 chapters sucked.

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

WWE Legacy: Not accepted. Too heavy on the dialogue, a lack of descriptions, and characters are in general boring. This might just be a different style, but to me, it doesn't work.

Story of a Legend: Well, you said it yourself. The duels of the earlier chapters weren't that great. However, the parts that remained have potential. Not accepted, but keep working.

[~MT~]

Name: The Dark Side Of His Heart
Length: Chapters-17. Words- 27,255 and growing.
Link: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-...age-1.html
Activity: Depends....I was grounded this past month...so that slowed my story down a bit....but now since I have my computer back and unless there's no writer's block (Very Rare), about 3-4 chapters a month, 5 if I'm lucky.
Example:

From Chapter 15. Blast From The Past (Click to View)

“We’re in Tragic Kingdom,” Marluxia mused, “Well, whatever’s left of it,” Said Marluxia as he flicked his bubblegum pink hair. The three were standing on a rocky valley. That was on a flat, cracked plateau. Above them was a large hill. On top of that hill was an old, decrepit castle. It was a tall five story fortress with four tall lookout towers at the tops. The large iron gates were open ajar.

“He’s in there,” Marluxia said with a tremor, “be prepared for a fight, this one isn’t coming easily,” Marluxia said quickly. The three then made the trek up the hill. It took them a good half hour because it was a steep hill. There was no life there, no trees, no grass, not even weeds choked this wasteland. The area was also swallowed in pure darkness. The light of the moon was the only light they had to follow by. The three walked in silence. They then came to the top of the mountain. Clear drops of water descended from the sky as soon as they stared upon the derelict castle. They gazed at the old castle where inside, their prize waited. There was only one obstacle left now. Before them was a deep chasm. Larxene gulped and looked over the deep gorge. She could not see the bottom of the abyss. She took out a kunai from her weapon pouch and dropped it down into the wide pit. The three listened for it to hit bottom. About twenty seconds later, they heard a small *plink*.

“Woah, that’s a deep ass trench. . . . . .” Marluxia said with a smirk. Axel looked forward.

“Let’s just hope the door works!” Axel said as he made a running jump for the gates. He however slipped and fell headfirst into the chasm.

“Axel, you idiot!” Growled Larxene, face palming her head.

“Do we have to go in after him?” Marluxia said with an annoyed sigh.

“We don’t have a choice now. . . . . .” Larxene said with a groan.

About You - Forum Time: 10-08-2008
About You - Forum Activity: 4,382

I hope you take my entry into consideration as I take great pride in my work.

[Mystery Guest]

Name: Evolution of a Duelist
Length: 61 chapters so far
Link: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-87186.html
Activity: At least once a week.
Example:

Example (Click to View)

"A lot of my dreams were about being taken over by the darkness," said Chris. "While being controlled by darkness, I could tell where other dark beings were. I sensed a strong darkness from a certain building, but I don't remember which."

"Well, the last dream I had involved you, Kim, and the hooded figure," said John. "I think it was telling me to find the place by going into a sewer and walk for a few minutes or so. Perhaps you could find the place if we walk into the sewer and if you sense the darkness."

"I can't sense the darkness unless I'm taken over by dark forces, though," said Chris. "I think the Crystal Beasts will sense the darkness, though."

"Yeah, good idea," said John. "Sadly I can only sense auras people around me, not of people inside other buildings." John and Chris jumped into a sewer hole and walked and walked for about an hour. Chris's cards then started to glow. He took the cards out of his pocket.

"What's wrong, Ruby?" asked Chris. "What? The darkness is here?"

About You - Forum Time: 07-03-2008
About You - Forum Activity: 620 posts

[Final Fantasy Revolution]

Question, say we have two Fan Fics right. If we submit one and it get's rejected can we still submit the other one or do we have to wait?

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

Midnight Thief, accepted.

Mystery Guest, not accepted. Uses varied formats throughout the chapters, repeated use of the word "said", which is plain annoying, and improper descriptions.

Revolution, no. Application is bound to a fan-fic, and not a poster. In other words, there's no need to wait.

[Final Fantasy Revolution]

(04-16-2009 09:17 AM)Nitton Wrote:  Midnight Thief, accepted.

Mystery Guest, not accepted. Uses varied formats throughout the chapters, repeated use of the word "said", which is plain annoying, and improper descriptions.

Revolution, no. Application is bound to a fan-fic, and not a poster. In other words, there's no need to wait.

Oh, ok. Thanks for clearing that up =)
It probably wouldn't be a bad idea to put that on the first post either =)

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

Fixed.

[Déjà Cru]

@Midnight, Kuja: I'll have your reviews up by this weekend. Just waiting for the second fic to be accepted.

[~MT~]

BTW, thanks so much for accepting us, you have no Idea what this means to me.

[Saiba Aisu]

I hope I didn't miss something glaringly obvious...

But is there any specific length that a submission must be?

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

A minimum of eight chapters or twentyfivethousand words.

[Saiba Aisu]

Alright. Thanks, Nitton.

[Soul Legacy]

Name: The Ghost Chronicles
Length: Currently 8 Chapters
Link: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-...age-1.html
Activity: Updated Everyday
Example:

First 4 Paragraphs Of Chapter 8 (Click to View)

Alex sat in his room; he was on his own looking at the photo he was looking at yesterday before Fiarce came in. The picture showed him as a younger child with two adults standing behind him. The adults looked the same as Alex due to his features, the woman had his eyes and nose, and the man had his hair and neck, these adults, were his parents.

He sighed and put the photo away; he stood up and went to the window to see a dead raven on the ground, he closed his eyes tight for 5 seconds then opened them again, the raven was still there, he then just ignored it. He went back to his bed and layed on it; he looked at the ceiling and began to think to himself.

“What is wrong with me, every single time I get the chance to ask Agas if my mum and dad are still on this world I freak out and start thinking about me and….” then suddenly there was a knock on the door, Alex looked up at it and asked, “who is it?” the person replied, “its me Stephine!” Alex then got up and walked over to the door and unlocked it. He looked into her eyes and smiled; Stephine smiled back and said, “Hi, um, can I come in?” Alex nodded and stepped out of the way to let her in, “thanks….” She said calmly.

As she came in Alex closed and locked the door behind them, Stephine turned around to face Alex, and she took a calm deep breath and asked, “What was with you last night?” Alex stayed silent, trying not to remember last night, Stephine asked again but not as calm, “Alex, what was wrong?” Alex looked up at her and finally answered, “you know why…..” Stephine held her hand to her face and sighed, she then took it away and replied, “We only kissed….”

About You - Forum Time: August 2008
About You - Forum Activity: 6,642

And another thing, i post my chapters like Edge posts his, when i complete them, i post them on my next post in the thread.

[Barragan Luisenbarn]

Soul Legacy, not accepted. From what I have seen, the characters are copy-paste, dull and boring, and you write insanely long sentences.