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MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER III)
04-08-2009, 09:03 PM (This post was last modified: 04-13-2009 04:50 PM by Mad Hopz.)
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MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER III)
Basically, this is probably a lot like MARVEL ULTIMATE ALLIANCE except with some of my own twists and turns added. We've got the usual superheroes and villians like Doom, Spidey, Wolverine and Venom and some not-as-well-known ones like Omega Red and Crimson Dynamo. Anyway, here's PART I, tell me what you think, I'll be making more.

MARVEL BATTLEFIELD CHAPTER I (Click to View)
MARVEL BATTLEFIELD CHAPTER II (Click to View)
MARVEL BATTLEFIELD CHAPTER III (Click to View)

Rate please.
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04-09-2009, 02:32 AM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
INSERT AWESOME RATING HERE!

Seriously, I'm a huge Marvel fan, so this is epic for me! It's kinda like the game Marvel: Ultimate Alliance!

Hope you continue with this one!
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04-09-2009, 02:49 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
Yeah, that's what I was aiming for. MUA just with more plot twists...
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04-09-2009, 02:59 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
Well, I will keep reading this!
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04-09-2009, 06:26 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
It sounds good, from what I've read it's alright! I will keep reading this, and for a score I would've gave you a 9/10 Very Happy
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04-09-2009, 06:42 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
Needs more War Machine imo.

Good, but no script speech.
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04-09-2009, 07:13 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
The Script speech did kind of ruin it, Try not using them...
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04-09-2009, 07:44 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
Script speech?
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04-09-2009, 07:55 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
This is script speech:

Bob: Hey Steve! How ya doin?

Steve: Good man!

You want to avoid that.
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04-09-2009, 08:05 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
(04-09-2009 07:55 PM)Fenrir Wrote:  This is script speech:

Bob: Hey Steve! How ya doin?

Steve: Good man!

You want to avoid that.

Maybe, this will be better...

"Hi Steve! How ya doing?" Bob asked, walking cheerfully to Work.

"I'm fine..." replied Steve, he waved 'hi' to Bob and walked off.
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04-09-2009, 11:15 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
No offense or nothing, but I like writing script speech better, so I'm just gonna stick with that for now...
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04-10-2009, 06:33 AM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
Well, that's fine. JI'm not really forcing you to make it like that, it's your fanfic and you can do whatever you want to iit...
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04-10-2009, 06:44 AM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD
This is epic, man! I love this. Keep making more!!!!
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04-10-2009, 01:11 PM (This post was last modified: 04-10-2009 01:11 PM by Mad Hopz.)
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
MARVEL BATTLEFIELD CHAPTER II (Click to View)
CHAPTER II Up. Rate please.
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04-10-2009, 08:09 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
so far i only read the first one, i think its very good but into the middle it gets tiring, the only thing that kept me reading is trying to find out wat character is coming up next so............i think leter on in the fic i will stop reading it =(, but overall 7.5/10
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04-11-2009, 02:15 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
Good job man! Your speech needs work though. Remember, try to think like the character and think of something that would fit the situation best. Besides my opinions, MAKE MORE!
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04-12-2009, 02:06 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
It's interesting. It would honestly be epic if you had Deadpool in it. then again anything with Deadpool is epic. keep up the hard work
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04-12-2009, 04:27 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
I already have plans for Deadpool... Very Happy Chapter III coming soon...
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04-13-2009, 04:49 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER II)
MARVEL BATTLEFIELD CHAPTER III (Click to View)
Yo, it's Chapter III, comment!
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04-16-2009, 05:44 PM
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RE: MARVEL BATTLEFIELD (CHAPTER III)
See! Now that's action and speech!! Keep up the good work.
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