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"Bloodstained" An Original Story CHAPTER [4] IS OUT! (Update:10/29/09)
10-08-2009, 07:16 AM (This post was last modified: 11-13-2009 08:43 PM by Blamonchesix.)
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"Bloodstained" An Original Story CHAPTER [4] IS OUT! (Update:10/29/09)
An Original story made by me.


Note: It's not as long as it looks. Read and Enjoy. XD

Here it is. Hope you like it.

Image by Saikano.
[Image: 4042050936_8ee58fffaa.jpg]
(Naru's hair is white btw. But still pretty cool. XD)



Character Bios (Click to View)


BLOODSTAINED







Chapter 5 preview XD


Chapter 5: Limit of Fate (Click to View)

Chapter 5 will be posted on Gaijin Manga. Comments are highly appreciated. (^_^)


Other

Concept Art
Rain Vanglin (Costume) (Click to View)



Not even sure if this belongs to fan-fic since it isn't really a fan-fic.
Hope a lot of people will like this. (^_^)
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10-08-2009, 12:29 PM (This post was last modified: 10-08-2009 12:30 PM by ƬЦЯBӨƧƧ.)
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RE: "Bloodstained" by Blamonchesix
Kool story dude, can't wait for more.
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10-08-2009, 04:06 PM (This post was last modified: 10-08-2009 04:06 PM by Déjà Cru.)
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RE: "Bloodstained" by Blamonchesix
This is the first time I've actually seen someone post a real graphic novel in this section. Kudos. It could count as either a graphics piece or a written work, so I'll evaluate it as both. Page 8 looks rather unfinished, especially the bottom part. (It seems like half of his hand is cut off.) Your backgrounds seem a bit bland also, mainly because there's so much white space. They improve, though. As for the story in itself, you have some odd character name choices. (I've never heard Myoumaru for a last name before, and I have a lot of resources.) Also, it seems boring. Dude meets girl, gives her something, demons appear. Not too much, if ya ask me. :/
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10-08-2009, 06:13 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" by Blamonchesix
ƬЦЯBӨƧƧ - Thanks. Will post more as soon as I find the other chapters in my room.

Rinne - Thanks for being critical. Its in these types of replies that I see my mistakes
and improve on them. Hope you'll still read the next chapter. (^_^)
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10-08-2009, 08:00 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 is up.
One thing's for sure: You draw better than me.

Another thing's for sure: You write better than me.

Well, your drawing, on a scale of 1 to 100, with 100 being the best mangaka's art you can imagine, would be about an 80. THAT'S INCREDIBLY HIGH, ACTUALYYYYYY!! Your story is a little fast-paced for me at this stage, so I couldn't grasp the scenario too well. But it's a good concept, almost as good as a cool alien-reptile named Joe who lives over 1,000,000 years in the future and has no arms and self-esteem problems, but has psychic powers, joins a delivery company that sends cursed or incredibly dangerous objects across the planet, with a perky depressing-looking homicidal maniac with a cool personality, and a homicidal maniac with a PSYCHIC SWORD with a nice personality. This is going to be my first published series...

A-anyways, your story is cool. It looks okay and it has a neat concept. I give it 7.5 stars out of 10. AND I DON'T GIVE OUT 8's OFTEN.
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10-09-2009, 08:46 AM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 is up.
The art is beautiful.
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10-09-2009, 03:38 PM (This post was last modified: 10-09-2009 03:40 PM by Blamonchesix.)
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 is up.
Thanks for Weather Report and Kiwi-Kun's comments. (^_^)



Fixed the chapters. They're better now. Read on. XD
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10-09-2009, 08:29 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
I really like it

i draw manga 2 i have 1 finished so i might post it some time

cant wait for part 2 ;D
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10-09-2009, 11:22 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
Cool, can people join?
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10-10-2009, 12:45 AM (This post was last modified: 10-10-2009 01:29 AM by Blamonchesix.)
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
Thanks to Kage Katana and Glass. I'll post more soon.

(10-09-2009 11:22 PM)Glass Wrote:  Cool, can people join?

I'm new at fan-fic. So what does "join" mean?
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10-10-2009, 07:46 AM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
Never mind that.
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10-10-2009, 12:36 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
Wow, wow wow! You are great at this, Blamo. I tried to do something like this before but I don't have the patience.
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10-10-2009, 03:21 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
Since I like the way this is going, I rustled up some kanji for your character's names.

妙丸ナル - Myoumaru Naru
妙丸香 - Myoumaru Kaoru
妙丸千菜津 - Myoumaru Chinatsu
レイン・ヴァングリン - Rain Vanglin (Rein Vangurin)

The characters for Myoumaru mean "mysterious circle," Kaoru is "fragrant," and Chinatsu is "thousand plant harbor." Hope these help, and I can't wait for the next installment. :3
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10-11-2009, 09:29 AM
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RE: "Bloodstained" Chapter 1 FIXED! (Updated on 10/09/09)
simply amazing, I'll follow this Smile
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10-12-2009, 05:00 AM
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
Saikano/Rinne/Master Red - Thanks for the comments.



CHAPTER 2 IS OUT! READ ON AND COMMENTS ARE HIGHLY APPRECIATED!!! XD
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10-13-2009, 10:31 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
Wow! WoW! Wow! Again. You are very good at this. I love it.
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10-14-2009, 06:28 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
Thanks. (^_^)
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10-16-2009, 02:47 AM (This post was last modified: 10-16-2009 04:41 AM by Blamonchesix.)
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
Bump.

Is it because I'm a Low Level that people don't like looking to this? (T_T)
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10-16-2009, 11:33 AM
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
(10-16-2009 02:47 AM)blamonchesix Wrote:  Bump.

Is it because I'm a Low Level that people don't like looking to this? (T_T)

Ask a someone to make a banner and I will place it in my sig to advertise it.
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10-16-2009, 12:18 PM
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RE: "Bloodstained" CHAPTER [2] IS OUT! (Updated on 10/12/09)
Ill make a banner

i really like chapter 2
i like the fight scene
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