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08-13-2008, 03:40 AM (This post was last modified: 09-10-2008 11:59 PM by vorrokhero1.)
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Yu-Gi-Oh!: Legend Of The Guardian (+ 1 point for comment) {Chapter 6 part 1 posted!}
This is my first fan-fic so be nice:

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Characters known so far (Click to View)
StoryLine (Click to View)
Chapter 1 (Click to View)
Chapter 2 (Click to View)
Chapter 3 (Click to View)
Chapter 4 (Click to View)
Chapter 5 (Click to View)
Chapter 6 (Click to View)

Future Ideas (Click to View)
note: all decks are based on a traditional format.
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08-13-2008, 05:16 AM (This post was last modified: 08-13-2008 05:16 AM by ~The Red Crusader~.)
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Nice! I cant wait to see more!
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08-13-2008, 12:03 PM
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RE: The Guardian (my first fan-fic)
erm, that isnt how Mystical Space Typhoon works. it destroys the card, but doesnt negate its effect if it was already activated. XD

plus, you need three tributes for a god, and it cant be revived like that otherwise i believe. XD

interesting start, and you are semi-good.

you do describe, but not in very much detail. go deeper with this.

i see real talent, but you have to work a bit harder. Wink

read my fan fic, Edge of Justice and see how well i got after my horrible Prologue. I am almost a writing genius by now... XD

you will get better, but to make the fic more interesting, i would suggest not using cards on the "not real" and limited list in duels, like Raigeki and Obelisk.

it would create more realism and suspense. Wink

keep it up!

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08-14-2008, 12:23 AM
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Update: chapter 1 released!!! hope you like it
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08-15-2008, 02:23 AM
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Bump.
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08-15-2008, 03:00 AM
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this is a great start, just check all the effects of your cards on yugioh wikia
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08-15-2008, 03:02 AM
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thanks for tip. ill go check
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08-15-2008, 09:06 AM
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OH MY GOD!!! This is cool! Nice twist.
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08-15-2008, 01:38 PM (This post was last modified: 08-15-2008 04:21 PM by vorrokhero1.)
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Chapter 2 part 2 and 3 posted!
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08-16-2008, 02:11 PM
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bump.
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08-16-2008, 06:15 PM
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It's pretty good for your first fanfic, well done. Can't wait to see more.
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08-16-2008, 08:18 PM
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RE: Yu-Gi-Oh: Legend Of The Guardian (+ 1 point for comment) {Chapter 3 part 2 posted}
chapter 3 part 3 posted.
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08-16-2008, 10:42 PM
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RE: Yu-Gi-Oh: Legend Of The Guardian (+ 1 point for comment) {Chapter 3 part 3 posted}
Awesome chapter dude but just to tell you Egyptian Gods brought back by Monster Reborn are destroyed at the end of the turn.Very Happy
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08-17-2008, 12:34 AM
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i didnt know that...
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08-17-2008, 01:22 AM
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This is really cool! Kale pointed out most of the mistakes, but this is really very interesting! Damn you make my fan fic look terrible...
Keep up the good work Smile
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08-17-2008, 04:13 AM
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RE: Yu-Gi-Oh: Legend Of The Guardian (+ 1 point for comment) {Chapter 3 part 3 posted
(08-16-2008 10:42 PM)senron Wrote:  Awesome chapter dude but just to tell you Egyptian Gods brought back by Monster Reborn are destroyed at the end of the turn.Very Happy

What do you know... the guy has a special Duel Disk! xD
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08-17-2008, 05:55 PM
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Chapter 4 part 2 posted
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08-18-2008, 03:56 PM
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kewl. I like. Great idea.
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08-18-2008, 05:16 PM
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RE: Yu-Gi-Oh!: Legend Of The Guardian (+ 1 point for comment) {Chapter 5 part 1 posted}
I'm impressed. You seem to have organized everything very neatly, but the chapters feel a bit too short, and you could expand the character descriptions. Also, try hyperlinkg real cards to their respective pges on the YGO wiki; it helps a lot.
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08-18-2008, 07:05 PM
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thanks for the tips.
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