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Yu-Gi-Oh! Armageddon


After weeks of writing, head shaking, deleting, re-writing, begging for help, writing for the third time, shameless advertising, and proof reading a hundred times, it is finally here. My fanfic, for your reading pleasure. Hopefully it will meet the expectation that I've managed to build up now.

This is my story, written to the best of ability. Set long after the events of Yu-Gi-Oh 5D’s, this story is of a group of strangers fighting for their survival as outlaws, in a world where duel monsters are forbidden by the tyrannical emperor. A lot of what I write draws aspects from and may be seen as similar to some of my favourite stories, such as Eragon, Northern Lights, and the Final Fantasies, but I will try to keep the plot unpredictable and exciting. I am enjoying writing it immensely, and I hope you enjoy reading it.

Feel free to post anything you think about this; good, bad, or indifferent. If you have any advice you can impart about writing or storytelling, I am happy to hear it.

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Now at long last... we can begin.

Chapter 1

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I give you a +rep. It's great.

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Thank you very much.

Oh yeah concerning updates, some of you who know me will know about my random working hours which can go from 0-40 each week, I recently had 11 days off where I got a lot of writing done, but I am unlikely to get such a spell of free time like it again. Still, I am several chapters ahead of the game, so I will be (boldly?) attempting to post a new chapter each Monday, Wednesday and Friday.

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Interesting, very interesting. I can tell that you spent a good amount of time on this. It is well written and so far a good story. I didn't notice any errors in reading, so that's good. The introduction is fairly compelling, so it draws the reader in. Can't ask for any more than that. I'm interested to see how the story continues.

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I also give a +Rep.

Good Side:This was a great story I really enjoyed how you described the characters and the surrounding area let me get an image of what the scenes looked like. Great way to end the chapter leaving us hanging waiting to see what happens with the guard

Bad Side: A couple of grammar errors in there, but thats all I saw.

Overall on a scale of 1 to 10 I give your story an 8.5 because it has most thing i like to see good descriptions of characters their location. Nice way to end the chapter, and it kept me interested the entire time.

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Thank you very much.

Kind of annoyed with myself about making errors in grammer, maybe it was just the getting into it stage.

Will post Chapter 2 tomorrow, although it will be very late my time as I have a long old shift.

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it was just like one or two words that should be switched don't be to worried about it.

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Decided to post Chapter 2 before work. Just easier.

Short and punchy chapter is definately short... hopefully punchy... chapters get a bit longer after this one.

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Amazing chapter i couldn't look away from my screen while reading this. Can't wait for chapter three to see what happens.

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You have no idea how awesome it would be to summon some monsters right now.

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Amazing chapter i couldn't look away from my screen while reading this. Can't wait for chapter three to see what happens.


Thank you. Chapter 3 on Monday.

You have no idea how awesome it would be to summon some monsters right now.


It would be awesome. Chapter 4 on Wednesday :lol:

Sorry if that's a spoiler, but anyone who thought there'd be a duel next chapter when my only known duelist at present has just been imprisoned was... er... hopeful.

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I can't even take a guess at what will happen next chapter with the way you ended this one. its going to make me check my comp like every 5 mins on monday.

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Just read part 1. Will read part 2 tomorrow. Great work. I'm gonna have to give you a +rep for this. Seriously, it's already amazing.

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Chapter the third is up. Bit longer this time, but something is nagging me and feels like it moves too fast. I dunno, I'll let you guys judge.

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Great. It's great. Konami has to turn this fan-fic in new series of Yu-Gi-Oh!

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Its not moving fast enough for me, but your the writer. You have put together another great chapter.

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Inpachi probably wasn't the best choice...there are some more appropriate monsters...blanking on that one vanilla at the moment. Not like it's very important.

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Great. It's great. Konami has to turn this fan-fic in new series of Yu-Gi-Oh!


Blush.

I might be over critical, but there are fanfics that are miles better than this.

Its not moving fast enough for me, but your the writer. You have put together another great chapter.


Yeah, I accept the fact I should have had a duel by now. I promise there will be one tomorrow in Chapter 4. I just wanted a more settled explaintory part after two hectic chapters (however cheesy/cliche).

Inpachi probably wasn't the best choice...there are some more appropriate monsters...blanking on that one vanilla at the moment. Not like it's very important.

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Yeah I accept that. I admit my knowledge of yugioh cards post-GX isn't great. Hence me recently spending 30 quid on cards for the first time in five years, continually spamming the status bar, and spending half my life on Yugioh Wikia. :lol:

Blast the obviousness!

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Side note on progress: Getting back into the writing groove today after a few days of doing very little, working on chapters 8 and 11, plus another duel in a further chapter.

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I am not worrying about the duel if all yugioh episodes had no story no point in watching.

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Side note of interest: Nero is based on the emperor depicted on cards such as 'Imperial Order', 'Spell Stopping Statute', and the other royal cards.

Oh well in that case...

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