sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Ok, so i have made a ritual spell card and a ritual monster, i think the effect of the monster is quite good and i spent a bit photoshoping these cards. Mech Lord Orange the Mighty Apocalyptic Awakening Tell me what you think and what OCG errors there are, Rate out of 10 if you can ^_^ (Fixed OCG, grammar etc) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OmegaWave Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 I can't read them. Did you shrink them? Or is that just automatic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 It's automatic, i don't know why the text goes so small when the card isn't. I guess it will fix it'self if you refresh the page maybe? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deathmankid Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 That is awsome! It should be a real card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OmegaWave Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 It's automatic' date=' i don't know why the text goes so small when the card isn't. I guess it will fix it'self if you refresh the page maybe?[/quote'] No...it's the same. I made out what I could of the card text. It is underpowered. Plus, there are many Grammar errors. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas Maximus Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 I can read them Omega =/ Why doesn't the ritual card have the proper ritual effect? Bad OCG, still ok attempt. 4.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Thank you for the compliment Deathmankid =] Could you rate it out of 10? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 How come they are so small? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Updated: Fixed OCG, take look now =] ALso increased size of cards to make it easier to read the text, sorry about that :oops: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dalekob Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 good ideas, but they have bad OCG i give it 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(!Death!Reborn!) Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 welcome Deathmankid!,great effort! 7/10 XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Thanks Devil Jin =] I will try and think of ways of inproving the OCG Try and make the cards more wanted. All comments apreciated =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Sorry to bump :oops: But updated OCG What do you all think about the graphics? And any ideas on how to improve the OCG for these particular cards? Thanks in advance Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shonenhikada Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 ah the art on the card kinda looks to realistic and sucks a little bit other than that you got the effect down pact. good job 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Thank you for the critisism =] I can make it look more cartoon like, i just thought that was the right belnd of colours and shades Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glorious eXcess Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 bad OCG.....7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 Tell me what's up with the OCG and i will fix it. Critisism that HELPS is apreciated, any other sort isn't =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glorious eXcess Posted February 13, 2008 Report Share Posted February 13, 2008 capitalize:Summon in Ritual Summon, not in just summon, but like Normal Summon or Tribute Summon where you are specifying what type of summon..Cap:Graveyard change subtype to machine or sumting-not that ugly ClockworkADD periods!!!AHHHHHH!!!!GRAMMAR NAZI ATTAX Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 14, 2008 Ok thank you =] When i get home i will change the OCG to make it look more professional and maybe make the monster look more yugioh like! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 15, 2008 Hey guys, i have rewritten to OCG for each card. hope this helps with the score! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted February 15, 2008 Report Share Posted February 15, 2008 Underpowered, and the OCG is fluky... 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 16, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2008 You say underpowered... yes it is stronger than a blue eyes Ultimate dragon, care to explain? Also, if your going to criticise the OCG, at least care to explain how it's 'fluky' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
terrorblazer Posted February 16, 2008 Report Share Posted February 16, 2008 I find that this card is relatively ok.......It could be a little more powered then it would be good. =)The pic is nice and the background is very detailed.Not a bad effort, it could actually be a really good card if there are a little changes here and there......keep it up. I give it 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sirbeanalot Posted February 16, 2008 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2008 Ok, thanks for the compliment =] And if you tell me what needs to be changed, or give a hint (apart from the attack etc) then i can make it better =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
terrorblazer Posted February 16, 2008 Report Share Posted February 16, 2008 Mech Lord Orange the Mighty I see you changed the att power but that isnt very important coz the originall had a whooping 4000++ att points. Its the during each stanby phase part that isn't good. Normally, The longest a monster can stay on the field is an average of 3 turns. If each turn, your machines get 50 or 100 att wads the point? Why not make it a something like machine King? Just raise the att gain for the cost (ritual monster + needs to offer 3 1800 or higher att monsters) So maybe you can change that part to: Each dark monster on yourside of the field gets a 100 attack for every machine sub-type monster on the field. (this effect is good as it targets both you and your opponents field to see how many machine types are on the field in total and best of all you are on the winning end!)=D Lastly you could change the trap card part to: Negate and destroy any trap card that targets a machine type monster on your side of the field except this card. (this way its not over powered and neither is it underpowered.) You could probably change the att back to the original though its a bit high like this =P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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