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Chapter 1


Chapter 2


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Wow, that's probably the longest chapter I've seen from you in a long time .-.
You've got a good start here; you still have that knack for subtle characterizations and setting the mood. My one small gripe is a lot of people kept saying "Right? Isn't that right, __" in the beginning but that's whatever.
Cool story, hope you stick with it.


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It's a pilot, it SHOULD be pretty long ;D


And, thanks :3 I honestly feel kinda relieved to have gotten back into writing =P

It relaxes me, at least, that's what it feels like it xD


I didn't really notice that "right" thing...^^'' any examples? o3o


I'll probly stick with it~

And some other YCMembers might just make cameos, who knows =P


It's funny, because at first, my idea for a fic was something like DEF, but with my brony friends

Then it turned into Pokemon high

Then it went to this xD
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Hrm, had trouble finding more than 2 this time. Never mind me then, I'm a loony.

Thank god you avoided Pokemon High...KS High was weird enough >3>

How long do you think this'll be?


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I have NO idea, but I dont think it'll be too long =P


And, yeah.....this is MUCH better @.@
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Chapter 2 added~ =3
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That was a pretty good fight. Very detailed action, but I'm confused by that one kick Issun used on the Gurdurr. If it simply kicked him back, Issun wouldn't be able to use momentum gained from the attack to kick Gurdurr back, unless it magically teleported behind him. But aside from that and a few minor editing mistakes, good chapter. I'm guessin we'll see DL tackle Gurdurr next.


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He used Counter

So it magically gains momentum ;D


And, editing mistakes? o3o Well, I guess that'd happen, since I didnt proofread xD
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Ah. I don't know if that was supposed to be obvious or not, but whatever.
Yeah, missing comma here and there, couple typos, but it's no biggie.

I'm just surprised I appear to be the only reader, a lot of people have been obsessing over Pokemon lately.


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Actually, Issun and Renji read it (and Sleepy wants to, when she has time)

But, they just tell me what they think of it on skype o3o


And, it wasn't really meant to be obvious xD
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To tell you the truth, I don't really read pokemon/yugioh fics
Ever.
But I'll make an exceoption for you DL. I promise to get both chapters read by around this time tomorrow. mmm'kay?
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To tell you the truth, I don't really read pokemon/yugioh fics
Ever.
But I'll make an exceoption for you DL. I promise to get both chapters read by around this time tomorrow. mmm'kay?

Ooh

Thank youz :3

I promise, this will be one heck of an awesome fic ;D
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It was kinda weird

So lemme get this straight, this will be from the perspective of the pokemon right?

And...DL is a pokemon as well?

this might actually be kinda interesting
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Well, considering DL was outright referred to as a Sneasel, and considering that all the trainers are dead missing... Yes. Both of those are true.
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this might actually be kinda incredibly interesting

Quick fix. :3

And yea, lots o' Pokemon and not much humans for the most part I believe. HA, WHO NEEDS HUMANS ANYWAY?

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Interesting fic here DL!

And YCM members as Pokemon?! You are crazy! XD

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Well, considering DL was outright referred to as a Sneasel,

I totally missed that 0-0"
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Oh, that was entertaining.
Issun is really cool xD

I wonder what attacks will you make Furret learn there.=P

Sooo, DL's priorities are a bit out of place here o3o

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Please do not necro stories that are not currently active. LOCKED.

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Hey, guys. I need your help.

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Unlocked so the OP may post latest chapter.

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Hey, guys. I need your help.

Besides, I happen to own quite a magnificent soup ladle.


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