Oh, didn't know this, I guess focusing on the aesthetic/OCG is not enough. Well the effect in and of itself is pretty nice and provides support to Dragons, which are generally pretty easy to fit into most Decks. It's actually quite a powerful card - not many monsters are able to stand up to a 3000 beatstick that's going to be able to attack twice most turns and also inflict burn damage on the side. Still, it's still vulnerable to non-targeting destruction effects like Mirror Force or Torrential Tribute, or even ones that banish/return it to the Extra Deck/switch control of it, so that's a balancing factor for sure.
Yeah, it's more or less to allow you to give some form of critique on what should be fixed so I can improve on it.
Below, Black has essentially torn it apart for certain things.
Granted though, it's essentially a 6k attacker in its own right for most intents/purposes.
While it might be weak to Mirror Force, Exciton and other things, it does a lot.
*clears throat violently*
This card is dumb.
It's an easier to summon version of Trident Dragion in a lot of decks, and that card is already an unfair design that just steals games.
You must remember, when designing, it is not in a vaccuum. This card ignores Dragon Rulers existing, and while they're no top deck anymore, they're still very relevant in design.
If you have a DRuler + Flamvell Guard, you make this. You can then plop another dragon on the board to have a 3K double swinger that burns to boot. That's an OTK for Tempest/Tidal + Blaster/Flamvell + Redox. Two of that combo are limited (not counting Blaster search), but Dragon Shrine exists, and it's still a design point that should be acknowledged.
This also works with DRuler + Debris Dragon w/Guard in grave, though that's not as likely to kill.
Now, let's move onto something perhaps more terrifying. Hieratics.
TEfnuit + 2 Hieratics (at least one su) = This w/Gaia Dragon on board. SS Tefnuit, tribute it for Su/Nep (iirc), get Vanilla Level 6. Tribute that one for another, get Galaxy Serpent. Overlay Vanilla and Level 6, make Atum, fetch REDRUM/another Level 6. Sync for 8 with Serpent/Level 6 you got from Atum/REDRUM. Overlay Gaia on Atum. You have 8600 on the board, with both burn and piercing to help finish the game.
Making it straight BLS would be even more unfair, as that removes the tiny amount of effort needed for the double swing.
It then has a TRA-esque protection effect as icing on top.
It rewards you far too much for not a ton of effort. The double swing shouldn't even be there, because effects like that are prone to ending games too quickly, especially on big cards like this.
Also, I really dislike that you used a blatantly evil dragon as a light lightning dragon, even with the lightning in the art. Speaks ill of the design to use somethign as blatantly opposite while making an effect that seems like a different card (Dragonic Overlords) than the card in the art altogether, despite it being an homage. =x
I essentially ripped the picture off of JazinKay's album as noted earlier, so if it was a Vanguard thing (or whatever series it came from), I wouldn't know.
But yes, the double attack is a lot [and I had forgotten about Rulers to some degree + Dragion while designing].
Compared to Dragion, as noted, it's easier to summon + guaranteed two attacks provided another monster exists; whereas Dragion tributes cards + only gets the extra attacks that turn.
The burn should be fine (although a bit menial at this point), but the double attacking effect should go as mentioned.
As for the last effect, I'll think of an alternative for it [either make it less of Thought Ruler's effect (which has a higher LP than what this card uses), or just get rid of it altogether]. For now, the latter option.
So in essence, reduced to just burning the opponent when it kills something; though it's a set 800 LP burn, regardless of Level/Rank.
I would have increased the damage to 200 x Level/Rank, but that would result in a lot more damage than it's worth; especially against higher Level/Rank things.
That being said, I could've made this require LIGHT monsters, but they already got Light End and various other support cards in Honest and whatever else.
If it means anything, I dropped its ATK slightly to 2800. While RDA + other things can run it over now, it should have enough ATK to hold its own in other cases.
So yeah, thanks for the CnC, both of you; especially Black.
(On a somewhat relevant note, I am playtesting Hieratics on DevPro, but more or less a Ritual version of it instead of the standard REDMD builds.)