My 3 Egyptian God Xyz Cards!

[AlbyPins]

Hi everyone, I'm new in this forum and yesterday I was bored, so i created my 3 egyptian god cards, but this time in Xyz version! I hope you enjoy this!

 

Reborn Slifer, Drago Of Devastation!

 

 

3 Level 10 Monsters

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). If this card have "Slifer, The Sky Dragon" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card become unaffected by other cards, all Normal, Special or Flip Summoned Monster(s) your opponent control loses 2000 ATK, and this card gain 1000 ATK & DEF for each card in either Graveyards, until the End Phase.

 

 

 

Reborn Obelisk, The Immortal God!

 

 

3 Level 10 Monsters

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). If this card have "Obelisk The Tormentor" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card become unaffected by other cards, and cannot be targeted by other cards, also if this card destroy an opponent monster by battle, inflict damage to your opponent equal to the original ATK of that monster.

 

 

 

Reborn Ra, The Hope Dragon!

 

 

3 Level 10 Monsters

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). If this card have "The Winged Dragon Of Ra" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card become unaffected by other cards, you gain Life Points equal to the highest ATK of a face-up monster on the field, also this card gain ATK & DEF equal to the ATK of all face-up Monsters on the field, until the End Phase.

 

 

 

If you like this, please comment! Bye guys!

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

Would you mind posting their effects underneath the card, so they're easier for other members to read? Thanks.

 

Also, moved this to the Casual Multiples area, since these belong there.

[AlbyPins]

Would you mind posting their effects underneath the card, so they're easier for other members to read? Thanks.

 

Also, moved this to the Casual Multiples area, since these belong there.

Sure, there's no problem! I do it immediatly! Thanks

[0PxPz0]

where'd you get the pictures from?

[AlbyPins]

where'd you get the pictures from?

 

Well easy xD I write on google, for example, "Obelisk fan art" :D

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

where'd you get the pictures from?

 

Please realize that this kind of comment is not permitted under the Advanced Clause (which should be written out in the section rules). You can ask this question, but also needs to come with proper critique (or you can just ask this via PM).

[greywalker]

I like them just think that ra could have been given a better name he is supposed to be a boss not a symbol of hope other then that I am gonna have a pro make these for me they look dope

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

I like them just think that ra could have been given a better name he is supposed to be a boss not a symbol of hope other then that I am gonna have a pro make these for me they look dope

 

Mind elaborating a bit on why you like the cards (least effect-wise)? AC states you have to explain a bit. 

[DiplomatfromPluto]

Those are some wicked strong cards with wicked cool art. The original playable Egyptian Gods share the following effects; 3 tributes to Normal Summon, can't negate their summon or activate cards in response, send it to the graveyard during the turn their special summoned. Slifer gains 1000 ATK for each card in the hand. Yours gains 1000 ATK for each card in either graveyard (is that combined? Because that could make it go up to insane values). It also reduces your opponent's monsters' ATK but unlike the original Slifer, it doesn't destroy them, which actually might be more useful with how many monsters want to be sent to the grave. This way, it mkes them go down to or near 0 and they take space on your opponent's board, or you can attack them to deal damage. My only concern is that all its effects seem to work on the detatch. Although since it can be used on either player's turn, it could still protect itself.

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). If this card has "Slifer, The Sky Dragon" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card becomes unaffected by other card effects. All Normal, Special or Flip Summoned Monster(s) your opponent control loses 2000 ATK, also, this card gain 1000 ATK & DEF for each card in either Graveyards, until the End Phase.

 

This is a slight rewording which makes it so that Slifer can reduce the ATK of other monsters, and also gain ATK, which means that if your opponent negated a monster's ATK reduction, Slifer could still gain the ATK and DEF boost. See contraction rules for card text. 

 

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). This card gain 1000 ATK & DEF for each card in your Graveyard. If this card has "Slifer, The Sky Dragon" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card becomes unaffected by other card effects, and all Normal, Special or Flip Summoned Monster(s) your opponent control loses 2000 ATK until the End Phase,

 

This is another possible rewording, which lets Slifer gain ATK and DEF permanently, even if Slifer isn't actually attached, at the cost of just using your own graveyard. As it stands, the ATK reduction effect only lasts that turn, which means you have to run it over that turn. These are just a few suggestions for how you might change its effects. 

 

Obelisk can't be targeted by effects and can tribute 2 monsters to blow up your opponent's field at the cost of being unable to attack. Reborn Obelisk is objectively better since it can atack and burn your opponent by that monster's ATK off one detatch, though it loses its targeting immunity, which might be worse than gaining the attack effect; You could reword it like

 

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). This card cannot be targeted by other cards. If this card has "Obelisk The Tormentor" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: If this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, inflict damage to your opponent equal to the original ATK of that monster.

This makes it vulnerable to certain cards like Raigeki, but it retains its targeting immunity. 

 

The Winged Dragon of Ra can turn your LP into ATK (up to all but 100) and can destroy a monster for 1000 LP. 

Your Ra can keep increasing your LP and could gain ridiculous ATK, but only from its detatch effect. You could reword it like this:

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot be negated). This card gains ATK & DEF equal to the ATK of all face-up Monsters on the field. If this card has "The Winged Dragon Of Ra" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card becomes unaffected by other cards, and you gain LP equal to the highest ATK of all face-up monsters on the field.

Or you can change it to: 

When this card is Xyz Summoned: negate the effect of all face-up cards your opponent control (this effect cannot 

be negated). If this card has "The Winged Dragon Of Ra" as a Xyz Material, it gains the following effect: once per turn, during either players turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material: this card becomes unaffected by other cards, and you gain LP equal to the highest ATK of all face-up monsters on the field. You can pay LP so that you only have 100 left; this card gains ATK and DEF equal to the amount of Life Points paid. 

This gives the card an effect like the original Ra. You could play around with whether that point transfer works as a detatch effect or if when the monster is summoned, like the original. 

These are some pretty powerful monsters, but they rely on having the original 3 Egyptian Gods, so I made suggestions that would allow them having effects even if you didn't have them. Rank 10 trains is the only deck I can think of that would be able to summon them, as their summoning condition is pretty much the only drawback they have. 

 

Ra also sounds like it could use a better name, maybe something with reference to the sun, or even flames. "The Hope Dragon" doesn't quite describe its power and status like your other 2 cards' names do.