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guuu1234

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#6161263 Yu-Gi-Oh! 24 - Finished

Posted by guuu1234 on 13 March 2013 - 07:06 PM

That's ... that's a shame Bahamut. I would call you Matt, but online respect for a person I don't know dictates that I call you in the way I did. But as I say again, It is really sad that you are leaving YCM and that you plan to stop writing. And let me just ignore your story for a little while and give you some personal history. I have been part of this forum for more or less 4 years. I'm only a 4 star member, and my interactions with members are few and between, but regardless I have been here a long time (in my opinion at least) to see enough of YCM and what every section has to offer to the fullest. I have bounced between Realistic Cards, Card Contests, Creative Writing, General, and TCG General. In 4 years, this is the best story I have read in this crumbling section. I mean no offense to any writers, members, or administrations of this section of the forum; but the Creative Writing section is not what it used to be when I first became a member. Not only is the name different, but the activity has declined, as well as the quality in writing that one can actually find. When a piece of writing that is somewhat presentable is found, a higher-level member feels the need to take it apart with ferocious intensity.

 

At first I was appalled by such an action, but then I realized that is how this forum works. You put yourself out there, then your knowledge and persona is broken down, then it is up to you how you chose to rebuild. I've seen many of members lash out and get banned or forever leave this forum, then I see a few that manage to actually stand up for themselves and gain a permanent place (and respect) in this forum (Clairedestroyer is the only immediate member I have seen do that). My point still stands though: This is a truly amazing story, and you are  truly gifted writer. Your words have inspired me to improve my writing, and to write a story of my own. It's tough work, and the quality my not be up to the standards that your stories have set, but the fact that you can inspire somebody else by doing what you love is no small feat. You should hold your head up high with the brightest smile possible, because you have done something truly special: With relentless determination, you have conjured up two stories through the sweat, tears, and stress that have plagued you since it's beginning that will forever join the few stories in this section that can hold the title of being truly completed.

 

Canopy Star mentioned ways you could have improved your story in better ways then I ever could, however the ending is something that I must put my own thoughts into. I hate it. I hate it because now there will be no more of your writing for me to engulf and aspire towards. I love your ending because of the emotion put into it was able to translate to those you read, but still I hate it so much. I know I'm just some random 4-star member that you (nor anyone else for that matter) will truly have a memory of, but I still want you to know that you will be missed man, and I WILL catch up to your writing someday. Best of luck to you.




#6127992 May now be locked - The Original Chance Format

Posted by guuu1234 on 23 January 2013 - 10:44 PM

O.o Wow, umm...............just wondering...............why is everything at 1?

Because I felt like it. But seriously, it's because I like Mermails and Atlanteans and WATER monsters are just my favorite to play with in general. By moving everything to 1, I can do that (it really forced me to think outside the box in terms of the combo's I used and plays I made) and I can at least say I won because I had some amount of skill involved and not just went automatic with repeating combo's and OTK's. It makes a game much more enjoyable for me : ), it is the the most consistent highlander deck I've built that is archetype specific, and there is a lot of variety in it as well.




#6109483 1v{Sora's win}Closed

Posted by guuu1234 on 02 January 2013 - 06:09 PM

Guuu, that goes the same for you. Adding a little more to why, it practically sets itself up. Why it's easier to use?
Thanks! :)

Sorry, I thought my explanation was clear enough. Sora's is a level 2 that searches itself by discarding it to the graveyard, which can then be used for a tribute, Synchro, or Xyz material. Then there is always that little fact that at anytime, when it is special summoned form the graveyard for later use (because it's own effect sent it there), it allows for more and crazy shenanigans. It also gets "Junk" support, I believe, which sucks itself, but still doesn't take away from the plays this card can easily make. Your card, imo, is harder to use because it's a Rank 9 Xyz. It's very strong and has a devastating effect, and summoning it may be worth it, but that doesn't stop the fact that even getting Damage Zone onto the field is a challenge. Also, seeing as you have an Xyz monster and Sora does not, Sora's monster instantly benefits from Main Deck cards (of the top of my head Sangan, Dark Grepher, Armageddon Knight, Allure of Darkness, Juink Synchron etc.). Your card is will made Rücken 定規, I just personally prefer the control, versatility, and ease of use that Soar has over yours.


#6008890 "What if" Yugioh

Posted by guuu1234 on 16 August 2012 - 11:44 PM

If Extra Deck monsters get 'summon sickness', then won't monsters that can't attack when their effects activate create unintended pluses?


#5978282 Happy Holidays Tournament

Posted by guuu1234 on 14 July 2012 - 06:20 PM

why not.

YCM name: guuu1234

DN Name: guuu1234 :P


#5933918 Yu-Gi-Oh! 24 - Finished

Posted by guuu1234 on 06 May 2012 - 05:24 PM

alright i'm fianlly caught up :D

I have to say I really love this story, it's so amazing. You know how to describe things well, without getting lost in the moment and going into details about useless matters. Every. sing. character is absolutely unique, which keeps this story from getting boring or reptitive. I also liked with you did with Daiki and his duel against Vennominaga (I summoned it on DN, my opponent rage quit ;) ). It shows just how strong the drones are, and that the main characters don't have to win eveything. I hate it when I know a charcater will win a duel, nobody how bad it seems for them, just because their a main character -_-  so that was extremly refreshing.

Another thing I like about this story is how you seem to be writing with themes in mind. That, in itself, makes me want to cry. Just because it's so rare in online stories. . .ever.

On to more recent chapters, I'm kind of having trouble keeping up with what appears to be "mystery charcters" poping up at what appears to be random. It's good for plot development, and I know you have a use for them, but it's so frequent that it seems to interfer with what is going on at that moment, and is confusing (though knowing your writing style, I will see the use for them later, I just don;t see the point now :( ). Like, whatever happened to the old man that was about to kill himself in an earlier chapter?

Even more recently, i'm having mized feelings concenring Clarissa. she seems the most composed charcter in your story, and is the picture of perfect control. Yet she risks a lot to save Daikai, brings him directly to her at a huge risk (with his cop status and all), and all without even seemingly to know him. 'seemingly' is bold because earlier when she had Wheiliem (sorry if i spelled that wrong :*) save him, you made it seem like she had a past connection to him. Then, to top it all off, she enters a Numbers Duel with him, at an extremly high risk, which seems illogical and inconsistent with her charcter's nature.


#5905909 Yugioh Heroes (Chapter 6 - Streaming Secrets)

Posted by guuu1234 on 07 April 2012 - 10:35 PM

Hmm it's something about comments saying "this is good" that rally grinds my gear. maybe because it's not detailed enough, maybe because it's not helpful ... anyway the idea behind this story is interesting, yet oddly overused at the same time. This fanfic just screams dejavu to me, but there are some interesting points that  make me smile, and some parts that make me want to rip my hair out. nevertheless, I must point them out for your continued development, because this is something i would really like to see through to the end.

My Critique


My Critique for Chapter 2


My Critique for chapter 3


DONE! Anyway what is wrong with your story is the extreme lack of detail you put into it (or don't put into it). The Cliches i pointed out (and the ones i didn't, such as the whole "sneaking on a boat to an island") aren't bad, but I say try to avoid them, because it will surprise readers, keep us interested, and make your story different from other ones. Seeing as you constantly break the "fourth-wall", i find it as part of your story, and it's very interesting in itself. However, I'm left wondering where will the plot go with this story. It seems like you aren't putting to much thought into certain parts, which is part of the extreme lack of detail that is present (more like not present) in this story. Not only that, but your spelling errors, sentence structure skills, and grammar skills are dreadful. I mean no offense, or disrespect, but I suggest you re-read your chapters slowly and out-loud. You will find many of your spelling errors, grammar errors, punctuation errors, and sentence structure/organization errors. So, overall, the idea behind your story is pretty good, however your writing is pretty ... well ... bad. The constant error and tense slips is distracting, as well as the lack of details.

P.S. The Duels were done pretty nicely, but i will watch your hand and how many cards you use at one time. While you did not use more cards that were in your hand (I counted), it felt like you did. just keep a watchful eye on that.


#5787215 The Boss Contest#1

Posted by guuu1234 on 29 January 2012 - 09:29 AM

unfortunately I said no more new contestants but again, I understand. no hard feelings mate :)


#5775919 Blue-Eyes493's Contest #4

Posted by guuu1234 on 22 January 2012 - 02:07 PM

Posted Image
Lore: When this card is Normal Summoned: Banish up to 3 Machine-Type Monsters in your Graveyard, then send Machine-Type monsters from your Deck to the Graveyard equal to the number of cards banished by this effect. During your Standby Phase: You can add 1 other Machine-Type monster from your Graveyard to your hand; Return this card (from your side of the field, banished zone, or Graveyard) to the Deck.

OT: Did the person above me just re-create Ultimate Ancient Gear Golemn?


#5753666 Most random effect i could think of!!

Posted by guuu1234 on 07 January 2012 - 09:45 PM

Great idea! The effect is pretty balanced, but minx is a little weak for a level 8. Your spell card is a good idea too, banish minx then get her effect, except for ALL of your monsters.

Good job mate. The only thing would be to work on your OCG (or TCG Grammer). I'm no expert, and effect's like the ones you put is tricky for me. But things like Graveyard or Deck should be caps,as far as that i wish I could help out more. srry.

I think you need a different picture for the spell or monster.


#5752973 Blue-Eyes493's Contest #4

Posted by guuu1234 on 07 January 2012 - 02:19 PM

Username-guuu1234
Will you try to get your card in as soon as you can-Yes
Do you know how to send points-Yes
Do you have at least 10 points-Yes

Wll send points after I post this.


#5737249 2011 Year-Ending Quick Contest: Elimination by Halves [LOCK]

Posted by guuu1234 on 29 December 2011 - 02:48 PM

When are you going to post the results? The final countdown is over right?


#5727663 Deaths & Duel Monsters (Chapter 6 is now up!!!)

Posted by guuu1234 on 24 December 2011 - 06:53 PM

So here is my 2nd attempt at a fan fic. Even though my writing skills may not be that great, I think the plot is interesting and uniuqe so anyway here goes: Enjoy



Mission 1

Mission 2

Mission 3

Mission 4: http://forum.yugiohc...p/#entry5974258
Mission 5: http://forum.yugiohc...p/#entry5992018
Mission 6: http://forum.yugiohc...20#entry5993640

Seems like my chapters are a lot shorter than I though :P don't fret though, the length picks up by chapter 4.


#5719791 2011 Year-Ending Quick Contest: Elimination by Halves [LOCK]

Posted by guuu1234 on 20 December 2011 - 04:56 PM

wow, i kind of feel disappointed :( can you PM me my score please.


#5699330 2011 Year-Ending Quick Contest: Elimination by Halves [LOCK]

Posted by guuu1234 on 10 December 2011 - 03:08 PM

username: guuu1234
Reson for joining: Go against high members and prove myself

I see myself in the finals on christmas day, becase I'm not that bad of a card creator ;p