Joey Miles Posted August 2, 2011 Report Share Posted August 2, 2011 joey a little broken hearted but you know thats ok joey can be broken hearted cause hes into a new game ashely went and steped on him hurt best she could heather was not around she was looking for my best friends wood kirstian liked to complain alot and like to dig in deep katlyn played around alot with 7 guys shed sleep steven lead me on oh yes for months and years you see sophia was a little sin she never ever told, she played inncent dont you know but hur heart was filled with mold brian was a little mean and brandon was no better and eddy seemed to be prestiene but that ended up in teathers so joeys been hurt alot but you know thats ok joey can be broken hearted cause hes into a new game swing swing around the pole music never stops little hidden games at night the jock are on top music hitting all the walls joeys lost his mind but thats ok its all in good fun cause its joeys time to shine. swing swing around the pole the music never stops move now around pole and watch they all line up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AsianGuy1137 Posted August 2, 2011 Report Share Posted August 2, 2011 At first I thought it would be about Joey, the character, but this poem's getting either too personal or too mature for most audiences here. People usually post fan fics here, and there's a poetry thread in the literature subforum, but almost no one visits that. Your style is pretty deep, but I don't really find the theme appropriate since the internet isn't exactly the best place to share real life drama. Then again, maybe some people might be able to relate or appreciate your poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted August 2, 2011 Report Share Posted August 2, 2011 This seems like something a child in a horror movie would chant in that awfully pitched voice that makes you wonder just what the heck you're listening to. (That's neither good nor bad; it simply is.) Spelling could use some work, but it's alright. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Joey Miles Posted August 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted August 2, 2011 glad you guys like it. well i think you like it atleast. and ty for the comments umbra i loved yours honestly it made me laugh alot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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