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Hello, my name is Kii. I've been working on a lovely sprite comic for awhile now, and thought I'd finally begin to upload it on to some forums. The story revolves around the star children, if you don't know who they are, they go as follows. Mario, Luigi, Peach, Bowser, Wario, Yoshi, and Waluigi. Donkey Kong is usually mentioned when the group of star children are brought up, but I decided I would replace him with Waluigi. I've made sprite comics before, although not the most um whats the word "good." In this sprite comic though, I use my newly found sprite-editing skills, my vast knowledge of personalities and humor, and my sheer determination to make a sprite comic with a balance of humor and adventure, to create something amazing. I hope you all can read, enjoy, and grieve until there is a new part. :3[center][center] [/center][/center]
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[center][center][color=#ff0000][size=5]~The comic will be updated once a week,unless of course if something happens.~[/size][/color]
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[center][center][img]http://img689.imageshack.us/img689/5985/marioluigistarchildsaga.png[/img]
[spoiler=Prolouge: 1-3(Continuing)]
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[spoiler=Part 1]
[img]http://img651.imageshack.us/img651/1527/1theusualstory.png[/img]
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[spoiler=Part 2]
[img]http://img696.imageshack.us/img696/459/2partduexistheduo.png[/img]
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[spoiler=Part 3]
[img]http://img714.imageshack.us/img714/9137/3ofshroomsandpeaches.png[/img]
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[spoiler=Special Thanks To]
Special Thanks to:
-Wiiboy4ever
-Sphacks
-Dimento44akaNad
-Xando
-Lemon
-Ragnarock
-Mageker
-Boomansion
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[size=5]Special Thanks To:[/size]
[size=5][size=4]:RidgeTroopa:[/size][/size]
Please check out RidgeTroopa's DeviantArt below.
[url="http://ridgetroopa.deviantart.com/"]http://ridgetroopa.deviantart.com/[/url]


:Nintendo:
:Alphadream:
:Shigeru Miyamoto:
~Most sprites shown are copyright of Nintendo and other official sources, I do not claim them as my own. As such I use them to create a derivative work. Please support Nintendo and the Mario series in general. Thank you.~
















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At first glance, this comic is a little weak. Other than the fact that Part 1 only has four panels, the cosmetic point of view isn't great either. First, the font of the text, "1 - The Usual Story", looks way too much like a newspaper heading, excuse me if that was what you were going for, and the text inside of the speech bubbles is kinda nice for the style, but I think that it takes up too much room when in such small panels. Also, the speech bubbles aren't very attractive themselves. Characters and story wise, Part 1 has told us nothing and I think you wronged Mario and Luigi's personalities. I'm very far from an expert because I have played maybe three Mario or Luigi games, but Luigi should be the shyer and more lazy one and Mario should be the "up and at 'em" type.



Other than those points, I like it and would like to see more.

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I was going for a fancy looking title witch is why I chose that particular one. I do agree that Luigi should be shy and Mario brave, but I don't imagine Mario being very punctual with time. I also think Mario would be the lazier one because of his weight. Luigi in some games may seem "lazy" , but I always thought of it as him just being cowardly. Too me, Luigi would be the one to keep Mario at his best, witch is why they make such a good team. I do agree that the text takes up way to much space, but I wanted to use the same text as the Paper Mario series, and as such, accept the consequences of having to limit what I say. This may actually be better for you guys, as it limits the filler and fluff. Think of parts 1- maybe 5 or 6 as "introductory" for each person. And it has established the main point I wanted to have established, Peach has once again called for Mario. It wasn't much in way of major story, but I don't want to move to fast. That being said I still thank you for you criticism I will make sure to take what you have said into consideration. On a final note, everyone has there on views on Mario and his friends, I try to capture the general image while adding my own touch! Thanks again for such a good well-written review. ~Shade

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