Ninja Pack

[WeebYGO]

I couldn't think for a better name for my set, so i called it Ninja Pack.
Im planning on using it for roleplays or something, so tell me what can be improved on them.

Monsters:
[spoiler=Ninja Master]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/FqlRE.jpg[/img]
Effect: When this card destroys a monster in battle, this card gains 100 ATK and 100 DEF
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[spoiler=Master Ninja's Assisant]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/q8lo1.jpg[/img]
Effect:You can discard 1 card to select 1 Spell Card from your deck and equip it to a face-up Ninja Master. Remove the Spell Card from play in your End Phase.
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[spoiler=Ninja Beast]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/kzL7I.jpg[/img]
Effect:Master Ninja's Assistant+ 1 or more Dark non-Tuner monsters.
This card cannot attack your opponent directly. This card can attack all monsters on your opponents side. Inflict half of the difference between your ATK and the opponents DEF to his life points.
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[spoiler=Corrupted Master Ninja]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/ib8LE.jpg[/img]
Effect:Master Ninja's Assisant+ 1 or more Dark None-Tuner type monsters.
This card's ATK and DEF is equal to the amount of cards currently in your deck. At your end phase, send the top 3 cards from your deck to the graveyard. In order to attack, you must send the top card from your deck to the graveyard.
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[spoiler=Ultimate Ninja]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/G7Ncb.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by removing from play 1 "Ninja Beast" or 1 "Corrupted Master Ninja" on your side of the field, paying 2000 life points, and sending the top 10 cards from your deck to the graveyard.This card cannot be destroyed by battle, and this card is unaffected by all other effects. At your end phase, remove from play 10 cards from your graveyard. If you can't pay this tribute, remove from play all cards on your side of the field including this card, and all cards in your hand.
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[spoiler=Spirit of the Samurai]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/9mTKY.jpg[/img]
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[spoiler=Samurai's Apprentice]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/DOyVN.jpg[/img]
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[spoiler=Samurai - Human Form]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/EApHg.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by tributing 1 face-up "Spirit of the Samurai" and 1 face-up "Samurai's Apprentice."
This card can attack your opponent directly. When this card is attacked, it is changed to face-up defense position before damage calculation. During your Standby Phase, if this card is in Face-Up defense position, it is changed to attack position. during your End Phase, both players get 1000 life points.
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[spoiler=Samurai - Demon Form]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/UsMGM.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by tributing 1 face-up "Spirit of the Samurai" and 1 face-up "Samurai's Apprentice."
This card can only attack by discarding 1 card from your hand.If this card destroys a monster in battle, it changes control to you and its ATK and DEF are cut in half.This card cannot attack directly.This card doesn't inflict damage to your opponent's life points.
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Spell Cards
[spoiler=Eclipse Scythe]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/LfpFE.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card can only be equipped to a "Master Ninja". Increase the ATK of the monster by 300. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, destroy this card instead.During your end phase, if this card is in the graveyard, you must equip this card to a face-up "Master Ninja", or else you must remove this card from play.
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[spoiler=Steel Chain]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/2lBnM.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card can only be equipped to a "Master Ninja." The equipped monster gains 300 ATK. If the equipped monster destroys another monster in battle, it is send to your graveyard instead.If this card is in your graveyard at your end phase, equip it to an "Master Ninja" or remove this card from play.
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[spoiler=Blades of the Archfiend]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/BKiNn.jpg[/img]
Effect:This card can only be equipped to an "Master Ninja". The difference between the equipped monster's ATK and the defending monsters DEF is inflicted to your opponents lifepoints. If this card is in your graveyard during your end phase, equip it to a face-up "Master Ninja" or remove it from play.
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[spoiler=Ninja Castle]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/2GV28.jpg[/img]
Effect:Ninja Master, Ninja Beast and Corrupted Master Ninja cannot be destroyed in battle. During your End Phase, you can pay 100 life points to send a card from removed to play to the graveyard.
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Traps
[spoiler=Second Heartbeat]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/ckJ9W.jpg[/img]
Effect:Select 1 monster in your graveyard and special summon it in attack position and equip this card to it. When the equipped monster is destroyed, remove it from play instead. During each of your Standby Phases, the equipped card loses 300 ATK and 300 DEF.
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[spoiler=The Pit]
[img]http://i.imgur.com/ql0iW.jpg[/img]
Effect:When an monster gets normal summoned or special summoned, it is forced to defense position and loses half of its original DEF.
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[jakeman541]

I really like all of the cards and they are not at all too powerful

[WeebYGO]

[quote name='jakeman541' timestamp='1341255385' post='5965570']
I really like all of the cards and they are not at all too powerful
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Thanks

[Gojira/Godzilla]

[color=#000000][b]Decent set, but ultimate ninja seems pointless, because no one would ever bother to summon it, 2000 life points and the top 10 cards of your deck, that coud put you at a serious disadvantage. you also might want to try and improve your OCG
overall 9/10[/b][/color]

[WeebYGO]

[quote name='~shadow~' timestamp='1341312028' post='5966227']
[color=#000000][b]Decent set, but ultimate ninja seems pointless, because no one would ever bother to summon it, 2000 life points and the top 10 cards of your deck, that coud put you at a serious disadvantage. you also might want to try and improve your OCG
overall 9/10[/b][/color]
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Ultimate Ninja can be overpowered if you synchro summon ninja beast first, equip it with something like axe of despair, and attacking all monsters. This way, you can summon master ninja, attack with 4k damage and potentionally win in 2 or 3 turns.
But thanks for the review.
Also, i will look for better OCG in the future

[Gojira/Godzilla]

[quote name='CharlesScene' timestamp='1341313401' post='5966232']
Ultimate Ninja can be overpowered if you synchro summon ninja beast first, equip it with something like axe of despair, and attacking all monsters. This way, you can summon master ninja, attack with 4k damage and potentionally win in 2 or 3 turns.
But thanks for the review.
Also, i will look for better OCG in the future
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[b][color=#000000]tbh i don't think summoning it is worth it, because 2000 life points, and the top 10 cards of your deck probably will put you at a huge disadvantage, and by the time you have Summoned Ninja Beast, and drawn Ultimate ninja you might be very low on life points, and then if you summon it, it would probably just get solemn judgement or torrential Tribute used.[/color][/b]

[WeebYGO]

[quote name='~shadow~' timestamp='1341315242' post='5966239']
[b][color=#000000]tbh i don't think summoning it is worth it, because 2000 life points, and the top 10 cards of your deck probably will put you at a huge disadvantage, and by the time you have Summoned Ninja Beast, and drawn Ultimate ninja you might be very low on life points, and then if you summon it, it would probably just get solemn judgement or torrential Tribute used.[/color][/b]
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Ultimate Ninja is unaffected by solemn judgement and torrential tribute. Maybe i shall add that he can attack directly to make him more usefull?

[M30WZ1K4]

First off, "Second Heartbeat" is a good A7X song, and, apparently a good card. I could probably use

For real critique, I could never see myself using Ultimate Samurai without Golden Homunculus (Not sure if you know what it does, but, if you don't, it gains 300 ATK for every card removed from play). Other than that, the card is pretty useless to me, because I could only get one, maybe two good hits in. Even then, it would just seem stupid to summon.

And, what do you exactly mean by "attacking all monsters?" Shouldn't there be a price to pay for you attack another monster? I don't know, maybe something like: "This card can attack again by discarding one card from your hand. This card cannot attack your opponent's Life Points directly." Just so that it would be even.

Corrupted Master Ninja is...corrupted. "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the amount of cards in your Deck." So, he'll have, maybe 40 ATK and DEF? So powerful. And, don't even bother adding a "x100" at the end of it, because that will make him overpowered. Maybe something like...I don't know..."This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the cards used to synchro-summon it" (I don't know the official term for those tributes) OR, "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the ATK and DEF of all 'Ninja' monsters in your Graveyard (all 'Ninja' monsters sent to the Graveyard after this is card is summoned are excluded)." Just a suggestion.

"Samurai - Human Form" is a little bit overpowered and underpowered. Let me explain: A level 9 monster that requires a tribute of two certain monsters on your field that has 1000 ATK doesn't seem worth it to me. I don't even think I'd even have this card in my deck with the two monsters it takes to summon it, because it seems to be a once in a lifetime chance. But, what makes this overpowered is that it can change into Defense Mode before damage calculation. I guess it evens out with itself, but, I don't know. It just seems a little broken.

The demonic form is a little more confusing. You have to do the same thing as the Human Form, and the effect is way too overpowered. You attack a monster with 5000 ATK, and you then get to take control to it? I'd be pretty pissed if that happened to me. I mean, if I had Andro Sphinx, then you can just attack it and, boom! It's gone in a flash. To me, it just seems like a Continuous "Mind Control' considering it can't even Inflict damage to your Opponent's Life Points.

And, I would like to recommend something: Make Human and Demon form into Fusion monsters. The Fusion Materials for the demonic form stay the same, but, make two more Fusion Materials for the Human Form. Then, of course, cut their effects down a little bit since they're easier to summon. But, then, you can fuse the Human and Demon forms to make some sort of "Possessed Form" or something like that. Then, you can go all out. Kind of like "VWXYZ."

But, then again, all of these are suggestions.

OCG could use fixing.

6/10

[Love of Ghibli]

[quote name='M30WZ1K4' timestamp='1341381555' post='5966948']
First off, "Second Heartbeat" is a good A7X song, and, apparently a good card. I could probably use

For real critique, I could never see myself using Ultimate Samurai without Golden Homunculus (Not sure if you know what it does, but, if you don't, it gains 300 ATK for every card removed from play). Other than that, the card is pretty useless to me, because I could only get one, maybe two good hits in. Even then, it would just seem stupid to summon.

And, what do you exactly mean by "attacking all monsters?" Shouldn't there be a price to pay for you attack another monster? I don't know, maybe something like: "This card c[b]an attack again by discarding one card from your hand. This card cannot attack your opponent's Life Points directly." Just so that it would be even.I think you mean to say it should be worded like Asura Priest or something[/b]

Corrupted Master Ninja is...corrupted. "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the amount of cards in your Deck." So, he'll have, maybe 40 ATK and DEF? [b]thank you someone has to say it[/b] So powerful. And, don't even bother adding a "x100" at the end of it, because that will make him overpowered. Maybe something like...I don't know..."This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the cards used to synchro-summon it" (I don't know the official term for those tributes) OR, "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the ATK and DEF of all 'Ninja' monsters in your Graveyard (all 'Ninja' monsters sent to the Graveyard after this is card is summoned are excluded)." Just a suggestion. [b]your suggestion is broken it basically says summon me late game so I can win the game.[/b]
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On to the actual set of "Ninjas"...no to all of this.


First let me state that Ultimate Ninja is not immune to Solemn because nothing in the game is immune to Solemn you are only granted you blanket immunity effect (which is a broken eff btw) on if you are successfully summoned. Countertraps can negate your summon therefore you were never able to achieve blanket immunity. As for the card itself...no I'm not milling 10, paying 2000, then banishing said 10 for a 2 two wall that implodes my resources while its alive and again when it kills itself.

Second you can't drop 5k monsters that can snatch other creatures you've entered the territory of broken Skill Drain + Demon Form equal slaughter fest of unhealthy proportions.

[WeebYGO]

[quote name='M30WZ1K4' timestamp='1341381555' post='5966948']
First off, "Second Heartbeat" is a good A7X song, and, apparently a good card. I could probably use

For real critique, I could never see myself using Ultimate Samurai without Golden Homunculus (Not sure if you know what it does, but, if you don't, it gains 300 ATK for every card removed from play). Other than that, the card is pretty useless to me, because I could only get one, maybe two good hits in. Even then, it would just seem stupid to summon.

And, what do you exactly mean by "attacking all monsters?" Shouldn't there be a price to pay for you attack another monster? I don't know, maybe something like: "This card can attack again by discarding one card from your hand. This card cannot attack your opponent's Life Points directly." Just so that it would be even.

Corrupted Master Ninja is...corrupted. "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the amount of cards in your Deck." So, he'll have, maybe 40 ATK and DEF? So powerful. And, don't even bother adding a "x100" at the end of it, because that will make him overpowered. Maybe something like...I don't know..."This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the cards used to synchro-summon it" (I don't know the official term for those tributes) OR, "This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the ATK and DEF of all 'Ninja' monsters in your Graveyard (all 'Ninja' monsters sent to the Graveyard after this is card is summoned are excluded)." Just a suggestion.

"Samurai - Human Form" is a little bit overpowered and underpowered. Let me explain: A level 9 monster that requires a tribute of two certain monsters on your field that has 1000 ATK doesn't seem worth it to me. I don't even think I'd even have this card in my deck with the two monsters it takes to summon it, because it seems to be a once in a lifetime chance. But, what makes this overpowered is that it can change into Defense Mode before damage calculation. I guess it evens out with itself, but, I don't know. It just seems a little broken.

The demonic form is a little more confusing. You have to do the same thing as the Human Form, and the effect is way too overpowered. You attack a monster with 5000 ATK, and you then get to take control to it? I'd be pretty pissed if that happened to me. I mean, if I had Andro Sphinx, then you can just attack it and, boom! It's gone in a flash. To me, it just seems like a Continuous "Mind Control' considering it can't even Inflict damage to your Opponent's Life Points.

And, I would like to recommend something: Make Human and Demon form into Fusion monsters. The Fusion Materials for the demonic form stay the same, but, make two more Fusion Materials for the Human Form. Then, of course, cut their effects down a little bit since they're easier to summon. But, then, you can fuse the Human and Demon forms to make some sort of "Possessed Form" or something like that. Then, you can go all out. Kind of like "VWXYZ."

But, then again, all of these are suggestions.

OCG could use fixing.

6/10
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Yeah, i based the name off the song, but it sounded like a logic name too
Well,thats why i wanted to give it direct attack ability maybe.
Well, i meant a Red Dragon Archfiend like idea, but your idea is better i think.
Also,i forgot to put that x100 in his effect indeed XD
But once again, good idea for an effect change.
I think i will make the Ninja Beast, corrupted ninja, ultimate ninja, Samurai human and demon form, and an ultimate samurai all fusion monsters, that might make more sense though, and i will remake their whole effects.
I will take in mind your suggestions and i will try to follow the OCG better, thank you very much!

[quote name='Beginning446' timestamp='1341390704' post='5967013']
On to the actual set of "Ninjas"...no to all of this.


First let me state that Ultimate Ninja is not immune to Solemn because nothing in the game is immune to Solemn you are only granted you blanket immunity effect (which is a broken eff btw) on if you are successfully summoned. Countertraps can negate your summon therefore you were never able to achieve blanket immunity. As for the card itself...no I'm not milling 10, paying 2000, then banishing said 10 for a 2 two wall that implodes my resources while its alive and again when it kills itself.

Second you can't drop 5k monsters that can snatch other creatures you've entered the territory of broken Skill Drain + Demon Form equal slaughter fest of unhealthy proportions.
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Hmm yeah i overlooked Skill drain completely, and i will re-do most of the effects soon.

[Gojira/Godzilla]

[quote name='CharlesScene' timestamp='1341401244' post='5967066']
Yeah, i based the name off the song, but it sounded like a logic name too
[b]Well,thats why i wanted to give it direct attack ability maybe.[/b]
Well, i meant a Red Dragon Archfiend like idea, but your idea is better i think.
Also,i forgot to put that x100 in his effect indeed XD
But once again, good idea for an effect change.
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[color=#000000][b]Ultimate ninja is extremely broken, and useless. So adding a Direct Attack ability will just make it even more broken.[/b][/color]

[WeebYGO]

[quote name='~shadow~' timestamp='1341405427' post='5967086']
[color=#000000][b]Ultimate ninja is extremely broken, and useless. So adding a Direct Attack ability will just make it even more broken.[/b][/color]
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Yeah,i think i will remake almost all of these cards as fusions with total different effects, i'll post it in finished sets when i made the complete deck.