mfw I just now realized the google doc didn't keep the link I had
...gonna... go fix that. So the song is there. For... context.
I am DONE. Entire thing's 1750 words. Because I rushed through this yesterday and today, I wrote this without really thinking about whether it was interesting or readable or not. The last part was something I tacked on in order to add some sort of narrative to the piece but honestly I dunno if it's any good. If nothing else I had a lot of fun worldbuilding this.
Ok. So, I gave your tale a once over, and all-in-all, I think I like it. There are a bunch of cliched ideas that were sometimes distracting, as well as a couple of world elements that I thought were strange, but all in all it was well constructed. I feel like it combined a bunch of other ideas I've seen elsewhere with moderate success, and could be used as the setup for something really good.
My biggest complaints sort of come in between the lines of the overall story. Like, how upon Eden's appearance, the world very quickly stopped fighting and decided to work together. While something of this level could eventually occur in such a situation, it's very unlikely it would happen to this sort of total degree. Also, when they reach the top, and find the button, I find it hard to believe that everyone just agrees to "press the button." I mean, sure, there's not much else you can do with that, but I can assure you that there would be waaaaay more staunch defiance against such a decision.
When all's said and done, tis a good story. Wasn't boring, kept my interest, neat concept; basically nails all the required categories of a short story.
sorry for bad cnc