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I think I need the original art for this one

 

OH MY GOSH IT HAS BEEN A THOUSAND YEARS

 

I love the way the hair color stands out. And the dark...things contrast pretty well with it. Though I find it a bit hard to tell what the focus is here a bit. The lines on the left are really distracting. Especially since they go off to the side like that.


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I think I need the original art for this one
 
OH MY GOSH IT HAS BEEN A THOUSAND YEARS
 
I love the way the hair color stands out. And the dark...things contrast pretty well with it. Though I find it a bit hard to tell what the focus is here a bit. The lines on the left are really distracting. Especially since they go off to the side like that.


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something like this you mean?

also this is the render lmao

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I really like it. The glowing colors and the contrast between them and the dark background and elements... it looks really cool. I still prefer the first version.


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Nice.

Still, I'm not a fan of these lines at the background as they mess with the depth you intended to create. And in v2, they dont look good blurred, and they still add some kind of weird flat feeling. Plus the flow seems too simple because of them.

I suggest you to try to blur only some parts of these lines and to have them with a non-regular width, so we can imagine some kind of perspective, or if this doesn't work, to simply get rid of them (and add smth else instead).


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Fuck, this is boring too look at. There is nothing that makes it stand out and want me to keep looking at it. You're missing a wow factor. It just looks like you're working on your basics. You have always had them down and a refresher is boring to look at, it doesn't help but to rekindle what you have learned. No one wants to see someone get on a bike after 5 years. When they ride a bike the 100th time after just getting back on it, they get faster and better.

 

Make this stand out in some way. Push what you already know to make me want to look at this. This is just a smudging piece, where flow is infinitely more meaningful. You're not stressing any lines. You're no emphasizing any piece. You could have this piece without the render, it wouldn't change that impact this piece has one me. Add to this piece, make the viewer do what you want it to do by defining other aspects, not just putting them in and simply trying to make a piece of art. This is pretty boring.


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Fuck, this is boring too look at. There is nothing that makes it stand out and want me to keep looking at it. You're missing a wow factor. It just looks like you're working on your basics. You have always had them down and a refresher is boring to look at, it doesn't help but to rekindle what you have learned. No one wants to see someone get on a bike after 5 years. When they ride a bike the 100th time after just getting back on it, they get faster and better.
 
Make this stand out in some way. Push what you already know to make me want to look at this. This is just a smudging piece, where flow is infinitely more meaningful. You're not stressing any lines. You're no emphasizing any piece. You could have this piece without the render, it wouldn't change that impact this piece has one me. Add to this piece, make the viewer do what you want it to do by defining other aspects, not just putting them in and simply trying to make a piece of art. This is pretty boring.


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btw this literally is a refresher piece to rekindle what i've learned lmao

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The lines are too thick. You need something else going on in the background and then the lines as accents to your lighting or something. Dope render choice and concept though


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I like the colors in general, but it's sort of hard to make out at first due to the lack of lighting. The blur on the hair also look artificial because the lightness/hue haven't been modified to match it's surroundings (i.e. presumably the blur is supposed to make it look like the hair is further back into the dark purpleness so should be darker, more red, etc.).

 

There's random light at the bottom right of the render's outfit next-to/behind what I think is a c4d. The outfit should be consistently dark from what I can tell. 

 

Lastly, I'm actually quite a fan of the smudge texture. I'm curious to see how it would look without the overlayed/soft-light c4d. It might be killing potential depth the smudge might have. 


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