[Written/DPR] Zanin - Punished Soul

[Fukato]

WIND Fiend Level 12

4000/2500

Effect: Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. Must be Special Summoned (from your hand) by Tributing monsters in your hand and/or field whose total Levels equal 12, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. Cannot be Tributed. Gains effects based on the number of Tributes used to Special Summon this card.

·2+: Cannot be destroyed or targeted by card effects.

·3+: Once per turn: You can target up to 2 cards on the field; destroy them.

·5+: Your opponent cannot Special Summon monsters from their Deck or GY.

 

To think we barely have any Main Deck boss monsters. At least, mainly generic ones. This one is granted abilities based on the number of Tributes used to Summon it and it is a pretty massive beater that has built in protection from card effects. It is kind of vulnerable to battle, and it has a pretty nice Summon lockdown.

[Eshai]

Well this is interesting. Special Summon by Tributing from hand or field, and with that can trigger "When this card is Tributed:" effects. However, there's a couple thing that could use some work.

 

• Not necessary, but I would make it a Dragon, particularly because this looks a lot like something that would be run in Hieratics since Tributing in hand triggers their effects and they have Level 6 monsters that could be used as Tribute fodders
• It should say "2+", "3+", "4+" since Tributing more than that would mean you don't get the effects.
• I would just make it 4000 ATK and remove the ATK gain. Instead, I would make it so Tributing 2 or more more monsters gives you the "Cannot be destroyed or targeted by card effects". That way having several in hand doesn't make for an instant CHAOS MAX Dragon sized beater with a similar level of protection. 
• Considering you sacrificed 3 cards for this effect, I'd rather it be able to opt destroy 2 cards on the field. Otherwise, it can possibly cause loops, which is not what you want.
• I might make the 4+ into a 5+, since that means you have to run a Deck of something like Ojamas, and have to go into a severe card disadvantage to get a nigh-invulnerable stun card, which even then I'm not too sure of even then. I think it'll be fine that way though.

 

Interesting concept, although I might rather make this a Dragon support card of some kind, and then illustrate that with the effects. Maybe even make it Special Summon Dragons somehow with the 3+ effect similar to how Red-Eyes Darkness Metal Dragon does.

[Darj]

Yeah, this right away looks like a toy for Hieratics, which get to trigger their effects and get 2 Normal Dragons on board along this. Making it a Dragon sounds fun, but IDK that may a be a bit too convenient and its fine as a Fiend anyway; at least you can search it with Tour Bus to Forbidden Realms, for whatever that's worth xD

Funnily enough, if it was a Dragon, with those stats it would be searchable by Melody of Awakening Dragon.

 

Not too keen on the "3" effect, bouncing 3 cards feels like a lot to me, and can ensue overpowering plays by re-activating face-up  Spell/Traps you control and whatnot.

 

I would also put a "Cannot be Tributed" protection so it becomes Kaiju-proof.